Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
students are the most susceptible part of every society. schools where form student's personality are seconds house for anyone. Some people believe that teachers impact on student more than its friends, however, others hold the opposite view. In my opinion, student's friends influence on them significantly for two noticeable reasons.
The main reason is that students spend more time with their buddy more than their teacher that lead to mutual effects on their personality. Unfortunately, teachers restrict pupils, who are more suseptive, how to think, talk, and behavior that lead to students prefer spending their time with friends. Among friends, students feel more comfortable and gradually look at each other's treats wether positive or negative. Therefore, friends change student's thought, behavior, and so forth that impact on their future directly. For example, statistics, investigating elements that influence on students, showed that teachers, friends, and even school's staff could impress on pupils. As over time, researchers noticed the way wild behavior of teachers cause students to push to their friends, not judging each other. also, relationship between students just did not limit to schools, and even in home they easily communicated with each other on Internet. finally, researchs demonstrated that friends 70 percent influence on personality of students directly or indirectly. As you can see, friends are main groups that iimpact on pupils.
Another reason is that students imitate from each other that lead to more effect between them than their teachers. Individuals, especially childhood, are very ambitious to be admired by others that cause to learn novel things from people who most interact with each other scuh as students. In other words, when pupils see person lack of ability be respected by teachers, they begin to absorb how that person succeed. For instance, when I was in high school in Azna city, often I and my best friend failed to get higher score on mathematic exam. Surprisingly, on midterm exam he could acquire the highest score in class and be praised by all students, while I again fail and be punished by my teachers and parents. my friend confided me that he cheated on exam in order to gain excellent score. Shockingly, I was impressed by him behavior and decided to try cheating on final exam which was very important for graduating. Sadly, my teacher realized I brought one page of book and fired me. If I had never imitate from my best friend, I would be in university now. This experience taught me, friends have direct impact on students.
In conclusion, student's friends are an important agency that influence on pupil becase not only spend more time with together, but also imitate each other's treatment. students should be careful in choosing a friend.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, look, second, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2373.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2268722467 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66279882527 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557268722467 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 702.0 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.5201279316 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.92 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.16 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238627018559 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0731031059872 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0831838285979 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156779069946 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0939626001559 0.0645574589148 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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