Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
students in any age range are susceptible member of every society. they spend a special amount of time both with teachers and friends, and subsequently, schools where form everyone’s personality consider as seconds house. some people believe that teachers impact on student more than its friends, however, others hold the opposite view. In my opinion, friends can exert great influence on students for two noticeable reasons.
The main reason is that students, disliking be lectured by teachers, gravitate to their friends. In other words, teachers confine severely pupils how to think, talk, and behavior, while friends do not. Consequently, in among friends who spend school and spare time together, students feel more comfortable and gradually look at superficially each other's treats wether positive or negative. Therefore, friends change student's thought, behavior, and so forth that impact on their future directly. For example, statistics, investigating elements that influence on students, showed that teachers, friends, and even school's staff could impress whether conscious or unconscious. As over time, researchers noticed the way wild behavior of teachers cause to pull students toward their friends because who not limit each other in spite of their teachers. finally, researchs demonstrated that friends 70 percent influence on personality of students directly or indirectly. As you can see, friends are main groups that iimpact on pupils.
Another reason is that students imitate their peers with whom they have some interests in common instead of their teacher. pupils, especially elementary school time, are very imitating person to learn novel things such as how to progress or dress from their classmate. In other words, when pupils see close-knit friend who lack of ability be respected by teachers, they begin to absorb how that person succeed. For instance, when I was in elementary school in Azna city, I and my best friend often failed to get higher score on mathematic exam. Surprisingly, on midterm exam he could acquire the highest score in class and be praised by all students, while I again I couldn't pass and be punished by my teacher and parent. my friend confided me that he cheated on exam in order to gain excellent score. Shockingly, I was impressed by him behavior and decided to try cheating on final exam which was very important for graduating. Sadly, my teacher realized I brought one page of book and fired me. If I had never imitate from friend, I could be in university now. This experience taught me, friends have direct impact on students.
In conclusion, friends are an important agency that influence on pupil becasue not only spend more time with together, but also imitate each other's treatment. students should be careful in choosing a friend.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, however, if, look, second, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, in other words, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2366.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28125 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73451985768 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578125 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 700.2 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4708733129 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5833333333 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198332938033 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0606357597548 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0593695640947 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132577220053 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0480402177299 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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