Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There are many Influences that affect students nowadays. Students spend a fairly long time in school, Therefore they are affected by the people that they are dealing with every day. I strongly feel that students are more influenced by their friends more than their teachers.
To begin with, Students are affected by their friends because they are in the same age which means they have the same interests. Students will constantly hold the same ideas and same passions with their piers, therefore they look to each other as a mirror. My personal life is a compelling example, a Few years ago, I was in high school as a sophomore. I used to hang out with one of my school mates, As we were inseparable, talking almost about everything. We had the same interest in music, sports, and going out. My life was greatly affected by her in many aspects, therefore I was leaning toward whatever she decides. The only problem that she was not interested in school, missing classes, and getting bad grades. On the other hand, I was an A student, always getting excellent grades. I was really affected by her I lost my interest in school, my grades dropped drastically and I turned to be a completely different person. My mother noticed that and intervened, She tried to engage me in different activities to know new people. In return, I made new friends, blended with new groups that are really interested in studying. The change really saved my life, as I returned back to my right path.
Secondly, students are more affected by friends as they spend more time with each other than with their teachers. The time that students have with their teachers limited only to school hours. On the other hand, friends see each other in school and outside school, adding more time with vacation. The greater time you spend with a person the stronger effect you on. Therefor friends have a robust influence on students. For instance, last year, my sister had a close friend in college, They were like couples always together. My sister was advised by her professor to pick an economy major, as he thought it would be the right fit for her. Although my sister admires her professor the most, she picked a different major due to the effect of her friend. She convinced her that if she had picked an economy major that would break their relationship as they would not be able to see each other as they usually do.
In conclusion, I strongly feel that students are more affected by their friends than their teacher because they are at the same age and spend more time together.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 745, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'an' or 'A' is left.
Suggestion: an; A
...ng bad grades. On the other hand, I was an A student, always getting excellent grade...
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Line 2, column 1170, Rule ID: RETURN_BACK[1]
Message: Use simply 'returned'.
Suggestion: returned
.... The change really saved my life, as I returned back to my right path. Secondly, students...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2111.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 449.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70155902004 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43147769256 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.447661469933 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 643.5 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.6732209561 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.44 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.96 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.48 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230525866804 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0810999009419 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0990352906132 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205293484977 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0786362368852 0.0645574589148 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.68 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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