Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Technology changed the face of the earth. These changes have negative and positive impacts on adults and kids. I believe that technology decreased kids' creativity than they were in the past. The widespread of computer games decreased kids' tendency to play with interactive toys like before. Children use the internet database for problem-solving instead of creative thinking. Also, electronics made kids lazy to do outdoor activities that broaden their imagination.
First, most children nowadays use the computer extensively. They spend most of their leisure time playing electronic games or navigating through the internet searching for fun. Gone are the days when kids used to enjoy their spare, playing with interactive toys. In the past, kids mainly had fun playing puzzles or building lego designs. These onhand toys enhance kids' creativity by stimulating the active thinking process. For instance, When I was a child, I used to play with blocks, which increased my imagination. I used to make sophisticated designs out of these bunch of bricks. On the other hand, my son, nowadays, refuses to use these kinds of toys and prefers to spend more time on screens. As a result, when I compare his imagination's skill to mine, it is less.
Secondly, Kids use technology on the internet to solve any problem that faces them. They utilize brainstorming less than before. This attitude decreases kids' ability to think actively. In the past, kids used to put their hands on any dilemma that hinder them. They did not have advanced tools that give readymade solutions. For example, Students in the past did not have an Internet database like google that answers their questions. Therefore they used to perform an active search until they find what they need. But today, all kids have electronic devices that provide answers to every possible question.
To conclude, I believe that technology has impacted our kids, creativity negatively as kids became more dependent on technology than active thinking. Therefore, parents should encourage kids to use their brains more often.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1743.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 333.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23423423423 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6898124371 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567567567568 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.3272372989 48.9658058833 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 69.72 100.406767564 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.32 20.6045352989 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.32 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21760384599 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0662076547162 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0559831527038 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14453546156 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0399818312045 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.17 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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