Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Be sure to use your own words. Do not use memorized examples.
Influence can often be underestimated. Exposure to certain characters and traits has a way of shaping our lives as humans. For students, influence can be derived from teachers, and also from friends. The prompt suggests that students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. In my opinion, I completely disagree with the prompt and argue that friends do have more influence on students than teachers do because students spend more time with friends and also relate better with friends.
First, influence on students due to friends is greater because students have more time with friends than with their teachers. Research has shown that the more time you spend with a person, the more influence the person has on you. For instance, a student will only spend classroom hours during weekdays with his teachers. However, the entire weekends will be spent on several playful activities with friends from school, church, and neighbouring communities. This way, the number of traits the teacher can pass down to the student will be limited compared to the several traits he will gain form friends.
Furthermore, many students tend to relate better with their friends than with their teachers. Building a healthy relationship is a very paramount key when the topic of influence is being discussed. Most teachers are very tough and difficult; hence, students are really scared of interacting with them outside of the classroom. For example, I had a very strict mathematics teacher in my college days. As a result, if I have problems with a mathematics assignment, I easily relate with my friends who put me through, instead of meeting with the teacher. Thus, the mathematics teachers had little or no influence on me, as I could not relate to him appropriately.
Of course, some might argue that determining the career path of the student is enough to influence that a teacher should have on students. This is not the case, as students are more likely to decide on a career path based on influence from friends. For example, a student who has a friend aspiring to be a lawyer will more likely want to be a lawyer too. Because most of the activities he will be engaged with alongside his friend will be bending towards law. They might decide to read a novel together and then engage in a reading catch up session to discuss the lessons. Therefore, influencing the choice of career path for a student is not limited to the teachers.
In conclusion, the influence of friends on students is enormous. This is because students spend a substantial amount of time with friends and flow better with their age group. Also, they tend to do several activities in common. This is a huge call for parents to be watchful of the kinds of friends their wards keep in school, as influence goes a long way in shaping the life of students.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 356, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, really, so, then, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, of course, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2361.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 484.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87809917355 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66573687701 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.423553719008 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 689.4 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.4943324087 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.8076923077 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6153846154 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15384615385 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270841891871 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.091051570753 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0699362244439 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183712239319 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0483632065711 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.98 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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