Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students who keep their rooms neat and organized will be more likely to succeed than students who do not.
Children's habits in their childhood or school will influence their adulthood. The task keeping rooms neat and organized is not an exceptional in this case as well. Some people think that students who keep their rooms neat and organized will be more likely to succeed than students who do not. I, personally, fully subscribe the former notion because of miscellaneous reasons. Two of the paramount ones are stated in details hereunder.
First and foremost, it is crystal clear that time management plays an important role in one's future success. The spirit of being discipline will step by step become an intrinsic value for students who keep their rooms neat and organized. Because keeping a room neat and organized means that the very person cares about the environmental influences on his or her life. By getting older, students who have noticed about these external effects in their childhood or school are more likely to consider either environment or external aspects of a problem when they want to make a decision either for their lives or in a company. As a result, plans which have been designed by these students tend to have a more potentiality to be closest to the reality. On the other hand, students who don't mind about their room being neat and organized are more prone to ignore some environmental aspects, so their works tend to have an amalgamation of different works with no deadline.
Moreover, mental behavior effects as a result of being neat and organized cannot be ignored. There is a mot which once Dr.Shariati, one of the most famous psychologists, has said that and this is, "There is a proportion between being neat and increasing ones focus." This means that being neat will sow the seed of being calm and as result, as being calm has a direct correlation with increasing concentration, one's focus will be increased. Besides, when students care about their rooms and know that they are supposed to be neat and organized, are more likely to shoulder the responsibility—a mental behavior effect of being neat—than those who don't. Support for this idea is that inasmuch as they are aware about things that are not documented for them but it is necessary, they seems to shoulder the responsibility of things which are documented either in their childhood or their future. In contrast, when persons don't bound up themselves to do some tasks which are not written as their main tasks, tend to shun the responsibility which have a negative effect in their future and it might bring up individuals with no sense of responsibility even about themselves.
To sum up, with all taken into account, I do believe that being neat and organized for students has positive effects on their time management and mental behaviors. Consequently, the success of students' who are neat and organized is more than students who are not.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, consequently, first, if, moreover, so, well, in contrast, as a result, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 15.1003584229 225% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.0286738351 227% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2384.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 479.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97703549061 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8135131711 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.450939457203 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 732.6 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.941546505 48.9658058833 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.444444444 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6111111111 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27777777778 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.470815178046 0.236089414692 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.173024283856 0.076458572812 226% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.1736160537 0.0737576698707 235% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.371556390281 0.150856017488 246% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0988399877947 0.0645574589148 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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