Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that in this progressive world where we live, human being should possess a diverse assortment of skills and talents in order to become successful not only in his or her personal life but also in one’s occupation. The ability to communicate appropriately with others and being well-educated are among the two most important building blocks of becoming successful. While some people prioritize social interaction to be the most important pillar of being successful, I, personally speaking believe that studying hard in school should be accentuated and be considered as the most important element of a successful person. The reasons to substantiate my viewpoint are elaborated upon in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, it is crystal clear that there has been an increase in the number of educated people which in turn leads to a change in employers’ inclination to recruit expert and educated people. In this line of thought, educated people are provided with a greater opportunity to be hired in different occupations since it is believed that having mastered one’s knowledge and wisdom in a specific scope, the avenue of success and productivity will be open not only to the person but also to the company or the work place one works for. Studying in educational centers like university and gaining a degree in a particular field of study is a good indicator of the person’s knowledge which is the foundation of success. To put it into a more vivid picture, Steve Amber, the owner of JAVA Electronic Company, explains that while employing staff, he prioritizes those candidates who have a higher educational degree or a better educational background. According to him, those people who have studied hard in schools are good navigators of the company and will make the company prosper and reach its fullest potential more expeditiously. Thus, should we study hard at schools or universities, the avenues of success will be opened to us.
Furthermore, undeniably the merits of studying hard at educational centers are manifold; among which improving one’s communicational skill is the most conspicuous one. In this vein, it is worth mentioning that most of well-educated people are equipped with social interaction ability which is one of the elemental factors in making a person successful. Studying in educational centers is like killing two birds with one stone, since various purposes will be fulfilled in this regard. Not only do people become knowledgeable, but also they unconsciously improve their communication ability, both of which are significant pillars of a successful person. As an illustration, when I was a high-school student I could not be good company for other people since I did not know anything about the rules of communication. However, when I mastered my education to a higher level, gradually my social interaction ability improved. At this point of time since I am a PhD student, I consider myself a very successful teacher, since I have a good relationship with others.
In conclusion, having considered the aforementioned reasons into account, I firmly believe that studying hard in schools is efficacious in making someone a successful person in his or her future job. Being well-educated provides the person a better chance to be employed by good companies and to improve his or her communication skill simultaneously.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, thus, well, while, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 15.1003584229 205% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 83.0 52.1666666667 159% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2867.0 1977.66487455 145% => OK
No of words: 546.0 407.700716846 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25091575092 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83390555256 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17856338177 2.67179642975 119% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487179487179 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 920.7 618.680645161 149% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.0289848518 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.894736842 100.406767564 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.7368421053 20.6045352989 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.63157894737 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192696492556 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0696180128868 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.039386263085 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130877925153 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00460042045382 0.0645574589148 7% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 11.7677419355 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 58.1214874552 60% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 86.8835125448 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.002688172 200% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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