Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In today's progressive world, every person is striving to attain pleasure and success in life. Being successful in various aspects of life courage people to continue life with more enthusiasm and grasp every opportunity to gain more prosperity. Some people believe that having a good relationship guranties their success in future job, whereas some others hold an opposite attitude. In my view, success in future career results from studying hard in school for two noticeable reasons.

The main reason is that hardworking during school's time increase your knowledge and experience requiring for future success in your career. When people studying hard in school, they get familiar with every detail of their major. Also, students trying hard to grasp more information in their education time, confront several obstacles which provides them with valuable experiences. Through these experiences pupils could better understand their faults and improve them that leads to their success in future job. For example, when I was in university, my whole goal is to get a grade in my courses to pass them without learning concepts. After graduation, Although I could find a lot of job opportunities because of my good relationship, I didn't gain any prosperity on each of them due to my low level of information on my field. All the time, I faced with problems which my lack of universitie's experince prevent me to solve them. Eventually, I had to spend much time on studying my universitie's courses again to be successful in my careir. As you can see, hardworking students have more success in future job.

Second, students, studying hard in school, are more creative in their future jobs. If students spending great amount of time in knowing their fields, they contracted with more people and use different means for searching that enhance their brain efficiency. Individiuals with this characteristic will have more novel ideas in their future job. For instance, statistics demonstrated a direct relation between studying hard in school and being success in future. Researchers investigated two groups of peoples, one who try hard in their education time and others use their relationship without hardworking in order to determine their creativity. Surprisingly, people who studying hard and spent significant amount of time on searching in their school not only have active brain, but they solve the problems with new methods and didn't utilize inefficient ways. However, people who didn't try hard limit themselves to old believes which prevented them from obtaining success. Therefore, prospective people in their job have hardworking in their resume.

In conclusion, I agree that studying hard in school provides people with more success in their future job. Not only it increases their knowledge, but it also enhance their creativity. I think people should pay attention to learning well in school as one of the key factor to success in future career.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, second, so, therefore, thus, well, whereas, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2492.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 472.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27966101695 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80091396495 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497881355932 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 748.8 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.1356997736 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.833333333 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6666666667 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.375 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29380725303 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109060432524 0.076458572812 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0811838101733 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213896490447 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0283273724867 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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