Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Sucess in the future is the most essential part of our life. People follow different ways to reach their aims. <i>I</i>n order to<span style="font-size: 19.36px;"> reach their purposes m</span>ost of the people studying hard in their school years. While some people think that for success it is the most important to have the ability to relate well to people, I think the opposite. To my mind, it is more important to study hard in school. I have some reasons to support my choice.
The first reason which comes to explain my idea is that studing hard gives you the ability being very intelligent. If you are well educated, in the future your colleagues and friend will relate to you very respectful. I think that educating well people study relating people much well. For example, my sister now working in the big company where she has many good friend who believe her abilities. She is very clever and everyone in that company trust her. and besides them she can relate to people very well. But , if she was not so clever, no one could rely on her. I think this an important issue to be taken into account.
The seconnd reason which is equally important in my opinion is that studieng hard you will find job that suits you. When you are doing well in scholl it can help you to study in the university you want. When you continue studing well at university you will be able find really good job. My brother is the best example of this. He was doing good at school and university and now he has the job he wanted. When he was in the last semester of the university he annonced on the internet that he was searching a job. Then one company observing his good marks both at school and university decided to ask him for a job.
Thus, to sum it all up, it can be concluded that taking into account the reasons mentioned above relating well to people is important, but studying hard is more vital by which you can be successful in your future job.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, if, really, so, then, thus, well, while, for example, i think, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1615.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 355.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54929577465 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50551090616 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478873239437 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 493.2 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.1731879378 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.4090909091 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1363636364 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.40909090909 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.363599436759 0.236089414692 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104754517754 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0751469256315 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222709526625 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0324408549043 0.0645574589148 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 11.7677419355 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.81 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.74 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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