Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For success in future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
In today’s constantly connected world, the world is changing at a rapid pace because of the action of humans’ activity and relationships. The issue of getting a job with more competitive salary has always been a controversial question among individuals all over the world. This matter can be considered from different aspects so that one can get new insight into this issue. While some people think the ability to relate well to people is more crucial than studying hard in school, I am inclined that if humans got good grades in their school, they would get a job with more competitive salary and generous benefits. I do believe that although persons who have a more outgoing personality may have a better interview, companies always want to employ a person who is accomplished and skillful in his/her field. The following paragraphs will illustrate my perspectives.
To begin with, it is crystal clear that if a individual were accomplished enough in their field of study, he/she would have a great job offers which helped him/her to find his/her dream job. In today’s modern era, I think all companies paying much of their attention to the skills of their employment and they always consider this important element in their interviews. I do believe that if humans are studying well in school and do much effort to learn fundamental knowledge, they will get a good job with a salary which is higher than average. Getting good grades in schools not only helps humans to find a well-paid and rewarding job but also creates more opportunities for them to apply for a job in many different companies.
Furthermore, if persons had only a good outgoing personality and the ability to be friendly and sociable, they might get an entry-level job although they might have a good interview with their boss. I do believe that individuals who want to get a job with more competitive salary and generous benefits, such as health insurance, a company car, and discounts, should have a significant grade in their school which based on how much they were studying in school. Studying hard in school not only helps humans to have a vivid imagination but also helps them to find a great job offer and a job that would be perfect for them.
In conclusion, I totally disagree with this statement and strongly believe that studying hard in school is the most important element for humans who want to find their dream job. If humans had well grades in their schools, they would find a job that would be perfect for them. All in all, studying hard in school not only helps each individual to find a great job but also gives them many other essential aspects.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 44, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...begin with, it is crystal clear that if a individual were accomplished enough in ...
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Line 2, column 704, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...tunities for them to apply for a job in many different companies. Furthermore, if persons had...
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Line 4, column 414, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ives them many other essential aspects.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, so, well, while, i think, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2193.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 456.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80921052632 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68410212916 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.436403508772 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 661.5 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.6315967924 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.0625 100.406767564 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5 20.6045352989 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306129063057 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112845247593 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0940237065105 0.0737576698707 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214089227596 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0196334238202 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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