Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children (five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Without any doubt, education is of paramount importance when it comes to a country's sustainable development. In this regard, there is a question as to whether or not authorities should prioritize the education of children aged five to ten over university students when allocating budget . Personally, I believe that governments should attach more importance to the education of these young children than to the instruction of university students for two reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
Firstly, some vital skills can be learned during childhood more easily than during adulthood. Those members of society who honed these skills when they were a child can spend their time mastering other crucial skills for the development of the country. For example, knowing two or more languages is necessary in our modern world, and it is a proven fact that young children can learn languages better than adults without any difficulty. As a result, a child who is learning a foreign language does not have to squander time on it later, whereas a university student who did not have the chance to learn this language in childhood has to spend countless hours mastering it instead of allocating this time to do research. Over time, this university student is weaker than their counterparts brought up in countries that give importance to language learning during childhood both in terms of knowledge in their field and in terms of foreign language capabilities. Consequently, this student cannot contribute to the development of their country considerably.
Secondly, while schools and kindergartens mostly depend on the governmental budget to afford their expenses, universities benefit from different people and organizations' generosity. Nowadays, universities receive a wealth of money from a variety of sources, including but not limited to their alumni, charities, and companies. Therefore, they do not have difficulty providing their students with the high-quality education and equipment they need in classes. Conversely, with the exception of private schools, public schools and kindergartens are deprived of such financial help. A limited amount of money leaves them with no choice but to reduce the quality of education. As a result, they cannot equip children with the cutting-edge skills they need in the future to foster the development of their country. Moreover, teaching very young children causes peculiar difficulties for teachers since they are playful, and their attention wanders quickly; hence, teachers should get special training that costs them a lot to know how to deal with these children. If the government ignores the importance of the education of these children when deciding about the budget, they will be taught with unqualified teachers and cannot accumulate knowledge and skills.
In conclusion, leaders of a country have to take the education of young children seriously by giving them priority when making a decision about annual spending because schools and kindergartens are dependent on this money but not universities. Moreover, by doing so, governments ensure that members of society get equipped early enough with the skills necessary for developing their country.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; whether or not; as to whether
...nt. In this regard, there is a question as to whether or not authorities should prioritize the educa...
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Suggestion: .
...iversity students when allocating budget . Personally, I believe that governments ...
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Message: Use simply 'except' or 'except for'
Suggestion: except; except for
...pment they need in classes. Conversely, with the exception of private schools, public schools and kin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, conversely, first, firstly, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, whereas, while, as to, for example, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2729.0 1977.66487455 138% => OK
No of words: 500.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.458 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72870804502 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96294191384 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 828.0 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.603152717 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.631578947 100.406767564 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3157894737 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.57894736842 5.45110844103 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285444197471 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0880348876248 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0488352441928 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190008513941 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0426106009217 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 11.7677419355 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 58.1214874552 63% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 10.9000537634 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 86.8835125448 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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