Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
in the modern era, success has become one of the important aspects for everyone. all people enthusiasm to know about this field more and more and based on this broad tendency scholars make and effort for extracting the rules of success and pattern behavior of successful individuals. I agree with the idea that people have high-risk abilities, and can welome new experiences, is always success through this behavior. in the following paragraphs, I will elucidate my opinion.
firstly, the people who like experience unfamiliar things can sooner achieve from many people to a lot of knowledge in different areas; thus it can make a big win for them comper when they go with regular method. to be more specific, if individuals have brave for new experiences, they will have more information about many innovative things; thus, they can become a leading person in many fields due to their new and exciting information, and this process creates many opportunities for them in different field and aspect. As a result, this idiosyncrasy causes successful persons to achieve a better and sooner condition for success than use the usual way. For example, I remember my brother had liked to taste new foods and never had afraid from the unpleasant taste of them. he had been doing this activity for many years and familiar with many foods in different cities and countries. Hence, he knew about every taste and food sooner than other surrounding individuals. one day, when he heard about a new plant that could be used in the food, he searched and found it, and tasted it. after that, he thought it can be a good idea to establish a restaurant that serves foods with taste and smell of it in different ways. this idea works for him, and his restaurant became very famous in that region. he always said, " I owe my success to my risk ability to test new foods than open a place with common foods".
additionally, individuals with high-risk abilities can do the activities that other people even do not think about them and in many fields, this ability is a significant step for achieve success. in fact, this ability aid a person to face unknown problems and try to handle them in an innovative way and can access to their goal and successful. moreover, these type of people due to their ability in risk have a brilliant mind and can use it for thinking and analyzing the situation that others because of their feared and low-risk abilities, never can find and realize to them, and just can pace on safe ways that sure about them and can guarantee of them. therefore, innovative thinking and the ability to better handle the unknown problems turn high-risk individuals into successful persons than they use just well know methods. for instance, one research in texas university show that 90 percent of successful companies, which are introduced in world level, have managers that are never afraid to test new way or act in manners that are high risk and not guaranty about them, they believe the success pass-through these unfamiliar methods and things, and when we use the manner that is well and always we do them, we can just get an outcome that we get any time with this work, and we just perform in the level of other factories. Hence, we can never get a luminous success, and we should welcome new things to become a pioneer.
in conclusion, successful people make a better chance for success with their risk power than people that behave just on a well known method. a risky person is always surpass others because of awar and experience new methods and things sooner than others and it make more opportunities for them. Also, they will have an open-mind for analyz and Handle the opportunity and challenge in the way that the low-risk persons never think about them for their afraid.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 40.0 13.8261648746 289% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 81.0 43.0788530466 188% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3145.0 1977.66487455 159% => OK
No of words: 656.0 407.700716846 161% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79420731707 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.06087906887 4.48103885553 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54892954912 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 212.727598566 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.423780487805 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 978.3 618.680645161 158% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 96.1307789111 48.9658058833 196% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.739130435 100.406767564 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5217391304 20.6045352989 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.73913043478 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.5376344086 361% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193085704844 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0685692471275 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0493069555285 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133969831413 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0183817781811 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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