Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today’s progressive world, the explosion of technology had noticed by all the people. Nowadays all the people in the different age range can utilize the technology and you can notice the aspect of high technology in all the lines of life. However, some psychology had believed that the expanding of techonolgy can effect on features of children and make them less creative than past. I am of the opinion that, development of technology and internet make the kids more creative and give them opportunity to release their talent and skills. The reasons to support my idea are illustrated in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, the source of knowledge which you can access are available on the internet and the children are exposed to learn them. To put it into more vivid picture, in the past when the children lived before this golden time, they could gain the information from the old books so they could not deep on the ocean of knowledge. It goes without saying that technology makes the chance that kids would have explored in all the information and it helps them to be more creative with a wide prospective. For instance, when I was a child, I just could read a poem that existed in my school books, but now my little brother can sing the whole poem of “MOLANA” who is the famous poet in the world, and can describe each line of the poet specifically for his friends.
Furthermore, Using the technology and internet create the safe environment to motivated the kids for following their dreams. For example, during my childhood, I used to take part to several classes for learning music instruments. So by spending much time to be physically part of these classes reduce my energy and deplete my passion so after long times I put them away and never follow them again. But my little brother can attend in online classes while he is sitting on the sofa so it do not take him much time. As a result, he can follow his goals without loosing his motivation.
In conclusion, having considered the above-mentioned reasons into account, expanding of technology can increase skills and creativity of children. So, in the future, we would have faced with the generation who they are really enthusiasm and build the new world with their imagination.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'does'?
Suggestion: does
...s while he is sitting on the sofa so it do not take him much time. As a result, he...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, really, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1875.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79539641944 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68713135221 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537084398977 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 589.5 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.4663856998 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.1875 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4375 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.75 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200894172561 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0696342599552 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0411496235136 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125036243543 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0397629619623 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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