Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is a controversial issue in the world that whether television advertising should be directed toward children or not. I firmly believe that children are precious to the society and these kinds of activities harm them and their families.
Firstly, youngsters have not a deep understanding of what is beneficial to them. They watch the television or other means of Medias merely for entertaining. Consequently, ads which have a fancy and colorful plot would attract them, no matter what they are introducing. Some of the Ads may contain products that develop violence behaviors. Some people might believe that families are responsible for not buying these products and they can ignore what their children want, however, I think all the parents are not completely utterly aware of advantages and disadvantages of a commodity. It is not all about products, many governments by targeting children, try to propaganda their beliefs. Although some people may believe that when they become mature, they would not remember it. I think that it is not true and it will affect their subconsciousness definitely.
Secondly, it weakens ties of families. We cannot tell that all families are in the same financial situation. some people in a country are in need. Accordingly, they are struggling to provide fundamental needs of their family. These kinds of advertising will put parents in the inconvenient situation since children don’t have an understanding about money. They think that anything in the world is available for them. When they watch a product on the TV, no matter how much money should be spent on it, they want it. If a family has not sufficient income, they cannot purchase it. As a result, their son would be disappointed about them. As a personal example, I remember that when I was 5 years old, I saw an advertisement on the TV. I cried for it in front of my father. My father had not a job at the time. Therefore, he didn’t buy it for me. I can remember two things now. First the toy and second embarrassment in the eyes of my father.
In a nutshell, I utterly believe that companies shouldn't use children as an intermediary for marketing their products.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, i think, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1814.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94277929155 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97432631388 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528610354223 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.8688369127 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.7692307692 100.406767564 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.1153846154 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38461538462 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0876221603549 0.236089414692 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0245633369232 0.076458572812 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.050171321306 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0804511683647 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0622420769711 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.78 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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