Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Media is a pivotal element in our life. It is edifying our brain to what our world consist of. This media contain a lot of materials that directed for the all population groups. Various points of view which are germane to the matter being discussed bring us to the moot question whether television advertising directed toward young children should be permitted or not. The popular sentiment to which I vehemently cling is television advertising made for young children should not be forbidden. There are two cogent reasons I will explore in the following essay.
To commence with, today, many advertising are representing a didactic tool. If we take a minute to ponder over it, many advertisement appeal attention of the customers by introducing a fact related to their product which can benefit the customer's life. A palpable example, my son, Ahmed, 3 years old, have learned how to brushing his teeth by an advertising was appearing every day on the television. When I tried to make him brushing his teeth, he refused to do what I asked him to do as I am learning him. however, when he watch that advertising about the tooth paste and how the baby that appear in the advertisement was happy inasmuch he could kill the warm in his tooth by brushing it, he start to say: brush- brush to make me help him to brush his teeth. As you can see, television advertising should be allowed for children age 3-5 years old.
Another salient point corroborating my stance is television advertising is a kind of entertainment to the children. It containing a plethora of songs, funny characters and bright colors. All these elements is bringing exciting feelings to the kids. For instance, as I mentioned in the previous example, when my son was watching the tooth paste advertisement, there were a rabbit with the boy which was singing and dancing while the boy was brushing his teeth. My son was dancing with the rabbit as well. Every time this advertisement was showed up on the television’s screen, my son was dancing with a big smile on his face. In many times when I saw my son crying, I was searching this advertisement on the YouTube to make him dance and having fun when watching it. We conclude that television advertisement should be allowed for kids 3-5 years old.
To recapitulate, whether the advertisements are educational tool, or advertisement is kind of entertainment for kids. Television advertising that directed to kids should not be banned.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, well, while, for instance, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2040.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85714285714 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95642580065 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507142857143 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 629.1 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.4541169879 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.7272727273 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0909090909 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.31818181818 5.45110844103 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214637009511 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0770852951453 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0796042163284 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155196162024 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0583227057388 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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