Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
It is critically important to raise our children properly, Therefore we have to decide what they should watch on television especially kids' advertisements. In my opinion, I believe that little kids should not be allowed to watch media ads that are directed towards them. As these television advertisements promote wrong information which manipulates kids' mind, while toddlers at this age are not well developed to differentiate between which is useful, and which is harmful. Besides, the Ideas they receive through these channels affect their behavior badly.
First of all, toddlers at this age are vulnerable, as they did not develop the right mindset that allows them to decide what is bad and what is good. If they watch an advertisement promoting a cereal that is entirely not healthy, they do not understand the criteria of healthy food. The companies want to make a profit despite the fact the product is good or bad. For instance, my son who is four years old kept asking for the cotton candy cereal that he watched in the advertisement. when I revised the ingredients for the cereal online, I found out the cup of the cereal is loaded with sugar. While the advertisement completely ignores mentioning this fact in the promotion, I decided not to buy the cereal. If I had submitted to my child's wishes, I would have caused him to get diabetes.
Moreover, these advertisements affect our little one's behavior badly, As these ads increase the temper tantrum and urge for those children.
Kids watching advertisements that promote favorite products will probably keep asking their parents to buy them. If parents respond to these urges, it will never end. As a result, kids will believe that they can own everything, they watch on the television. For instance, my niece who is two years old, asks my sister for all the toys related to Disney channels that she watches daily. When my sister refused, she kept crying and complaining all day. Sometimes she gets in a long temper tantrum that turns her parents's life to hell. Once my sister canceled the subscription with the channel, my niece's bad behavior ceased.
In conclusion, I believe that targeting toddlers with advertisements should be disallowed as those kids are incapable of deciding between wrong and right. Also, kids' behavior is affected badly.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 485, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: When
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1931.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00259067358 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78634259665 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536269430052 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 591.3 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 11.0 3.51792114695 313% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.1816282352 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.9523809524 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.380952381 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.109217150665 0.236089414692 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0321102037035 0.076458572812 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0400838702501 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0697289543919 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.038125350999 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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