Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, more people around the world have the opportunity to study at the university and colleges, which forced it to debate about the best way to allocate the education budget. In this sense, some people suggest that is correct to assign an equal quantity of money to both social activities and libraries. Nevertheless, I disagree with this idea for two reasons which I will explain in this essay with some level of detail.
First and foremost, participating in social events and physical activities are not an essential condition for the vocation training of the students. For that reason is faulty thinking about the possibility to allocate the same amount of money as classes and libraries due to these activities are not crucial for optimal professional preparation. For example, a high number of universities in the United States support that is important to assign a substantial percent of the educational budget in academic formation due to they want to improve the quality of the students through technological classes and interactive libraries. In this sense, if the university allocates more money for classes instead of social activities, they will have a positive impact on the professional formation of their students.
Another important reason is that the percentage of student participants in social activities such as social events and physical activities are much lower than the rate of students which attend to university classes or spend their time going to the libraries. In that way, is not correct the idea of using a significant quantity of money in activities with lower participation. For example, administrative staff of some universities in Europe decided to allocate 65% of their educational budget in classes and libraries and the others 35% in payments of employers and the support of sports teams and social activities.
In sum, while some people support the claim that the money support in sports teams and social activities are just as crucial as classes and libraries, the rest of us think that it is no the best way to enhance the skills of their students. Finally, I would recommend following the experience of European universities about the way to allocating their financial resources.
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Suggestion: now
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, nevertheless, so, while, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1876.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 360.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21111111111 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9526928492 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.452777777778 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 599.4 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.0332242712 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.333333333 100.406767564 156% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.0 20.6045352989 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41666666667 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266650505511 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0998990824064 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0391186313659 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172820346649 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0430341610798 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 11.7677419355 154% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.57 58.1214874552 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.1575268817 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.53 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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