Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
There are many facilities in the universities and colleges which are allow people to participate such as sports and libraries. In contemporary society, some people argue that sports and social activities are important as same as classes and libraries, and they should equally acquire subsidy. Personally, it seems reasonable, and I agree that sports and social events are beneficial for student life in the same way that classes do. This essay will provide more aspects and examples to support this idea in the subsequent paragraphs.
First and foremost, sports and social events are the same essential in profession as classes. Most careers in this society, such as actor, politician and dealer, require both knowledge and sociability for good performance. Therefore, if the institutes obviously keep an eye on sports and social activities, students will have more opportunities to amend their sociability and physical skills. To illustrate this, Elon Musk is a businessman who creates many innovations such as PayPal system and Tesla motors. He is the one of the most famous persons that presently influence people and societies, and his success not only has become by witness but also has been supported by his sociability. He is splendid on representing himself on the social events and good on communicating other people. For this reason, Elon Musk is successful because after he design something, he can attract many people by his sociability.
Secondly, social activities and sports provide students a wider communication. People who have joining these activities will improve their sociability. Moreover, they get more communication with many different people that will provide a diversity of perspectives. Those are considerably help people when they deal with their life’s problems. I can attest this from my own experience, when I studied at Chulalongkorn University, I participated in many social events such as community services and sport competitions. I made a lot of friends who came from different faculties, and I learned many different aspects which broadened my perspective horizon. Nowadays, I usually confer my friends in many things that I do not perceive enough such as financial and marketing. It is certainly clear to see why people should have a diverse connection.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that sports and sociable events at universities and colleges are important and should acquire subsidy equal to classes and libraries. This is because they are beneficial in many career and provide the wide communication.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 851, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'designs'.
Suggestion: designs
...lon Musk is successful because after he design something, he can attract many people b...
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Line 9, column 196, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...eover, they get more communication with many different people that will provide a diversity of...
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Line 9, column 288, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'helped'.
Suggestion: helped
...of perspectives. Those are considerably help people when they deal with their life&a...
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Line 9, column 595, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...from different faculties, and I learned many different aspects which broadened my perspective ...
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Line 13, column 208, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun career seems to be countable; consider using: 'many careers'.
Suggestion: many careers
... This is because they are beneficial in many career and provide the wide communication.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, in conclusion, such as, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2172.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06267754587 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5125 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 686.7 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.1922005136 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.428571429 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0476190476 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95238095238 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197458979265 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0625558651676 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0676418486603 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146095202151 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0693219182616 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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