Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should give the same amount of money to their students’ sports activities as they give to their university libraries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Money is a major crisis today to obtain anything starting from a small pin to a big branded car. In such a case, anyone needs to be pondered carefully to allocate the cash for educational purpose. In my opinion, the universities should spend the same amount of money to their student’s sports activities as they give to their libraries. I feel this way for a few reasons because it helps students to excel in their skills and resources can be updated to contemporary situations.
To begin with, students can access the updated version of resources to improve their skills. Presently, the world is moving in a fast paced environment, where access is limited to each individual. When there is a possibility for the college's to purchase the materials as a whole, it will be an advantage to students to use it with no additional fees, as it will be covered under normal school bills. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was a student at California University in 2010. The college didn't have enough resources for candidates to use it. Later, they purchased many sports goods materials due to rise in international funds. It not only helped may mentees to improve their soft skill in a variety of sports like basketball, soccer, tennis but also grow physically strong due to various athletic exercise. If the university had not improved the sports department, I would not be thriving today in my life.
In addition, tutors get an option to update to the latest modality and improve their knowledge. Many students can’t afford a computer while they are still studying. They are already dependent on their parents for their school fees, food and commute charges. On top of that, they cannot demand parents to purchase desktops. For instance, I was from a middle-class family, and both of my parents work really hard to manage family assistance. So, I cannot order them to buy all the books for my study purpose. In fact, my major subject was science and I have to use many books by different authors to get updated myself to the current thesis. This would be possible by only getting access to the digital library at my college with no additional dollars. Even a thousand-page book size can be compressed in one tiny folder in the computer, which I can access through my phone even when I am at home. If technology has not advanced, it would be hard for me to finish my research paper on time to get my degree.
To sum up, I strongly believe that, by improving the sports and library department in a University, the student will get a chance to improve their soft skill in sports and also to get access to the digital library at their fingertip. Won’t you feel that you want to upgrade when all others? Ponder carefully before you decide.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, really, so, still, while, for instance, i feel, in addition, in fact, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2293.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 484.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73760330579 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7185772662 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518595041322 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 729.0 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3174184777 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.1923076923 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6153846154 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57692307692 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24385837498 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0696951541929 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112203427437 0.0737576698707 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172681416713 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0903885404976 0.0645574589148 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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