Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: “Video games offer benefits to children.” Provide reason and examples to support your stance.
In my opinion, video games are the danger that is threatening our young generations in different ways. Recently, they have become the most attractive entertainment for children everywhere. But when this attraction turns into an addiction that harms the physical health, affects mentality or even impairs the quality of life, then a red flag should be raised and serious actions must be taken before it’s too late. Therefore, I don’t agree that computer games offer any advantages for young aged.
Firstly, the programmers of these electronic games design them in a tempting form and are confident that children will love them, and don’t mind spending a long time playing on them. My point here is that some kids suffer from vision impairments and even brain damage as misusing them affects certain areas that are responsible for the eyes and brain functions. For instance, my eight-year-old daughter used to spend all day playing on her tablet.one day, she woke up screaming because of headaches. When we took her to the doctor, he said that was due to focusing for long times on the screen. Then we limited the screen time into one hour per week which has worked very good.
Secondly, these games affect children’s psychological coherence and their relationships with others. Excessive game playing can cause depression, lack of concentration and self-control which would result in violent behaviors and even suicide. I read a report a couple of weeks ago about a 13-year-old who had stabbed his teacher to death. When the police caught him he said that he had copied one of the characters of PlayStation. His mom said that her son had changed a lot had and become, aggressive, nervous and loved to lock himself in his room. He had lost interest in studying months before the murder after he had always been so good at school. Just like that, that little boy has lost everything because of these games.
Lastly, these games affect the living satisfaction of the young aged. Because when they waste their time playing, that will affect the other aspects. They will miss going out with friends, studying, eating at regular times and even sleeping regularly. Children don’t know how to regulate their time without the help of adults. But if adults neglected to organize their kids’ time, they would stay playing all day long. I will use the same example as my daughter.
In conclusion, I don’t consider video games has any beneficial effects on children in anyways. In fact, they could be the reason for a lot of complications that kids might face during their lives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2190.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 434.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04608294931 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69873118198 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603686635945 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 646.2 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.349493147 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.25 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0833333333 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45833333333 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154575447954 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0476560615756 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0613370952518 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0979707896869 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0446087857196 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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