Describe a fear you had to overcome. How did you overcome it?
No matter how strong we are, but deep inside our hearts, there is always a fear of something that frightened us. It could be a phobia of heights or airplanes or even a fear to lose our beloved ones. Sometimes we succeed to overcome that feeling but sometimes we don’t. For me, the biggest fear since I was a child is to lose my parents. I couldn’t accept the idea of living a single day without them. But fortunately, I was capable to overcome in different ways. Like seeking professional advice, getting closer to God and I train myself to always be positive.
I always help but wonder, why people have to die and leave behind their loved ones to grieve? That question was the reason to raise a fear inside my heart of losing my parents. I have always taken care of them as if I was their caretaker. If any of them had gotten sick, I would be woken up all night checking on him/her and giving medications if any on time. Then I suddenly lost my mother which has turned my world upside down. That has made me feel that I could lose my dad as well anytime, so my fear grew up. I asked for help from a friend of mine who is a psychiatrist who started to call me every week. She was so helpful, especially that she has known my family since we were kids which eased up our sessions until I felt better and that I finally was able to control my fear.
As a Muslim, I thought since I’m doing my prayers regularly, fasting Ramadan(Our fasting month), reading Quraan(our holy book) and being nice to people is all I needed to be close to God. I thought what else God would need from us? But the answer to that question had opened new windows in my life. Windows that had brought more peace and serenity because when I was looking for something from God, he gave me more. Consequently, the fear in my heart was replaced with calmness as God had promised in all the Holly books.
I started to read books that train you on how to think positively and get rid of all the negative thoughts. For instance, when I start thinking and worrying about my dad, I grab a piece of paper and type everything about it as the book said. So I feel like I’m looking right at my problem and think how small it is. It wasn't that simple in the beginning, but as I have said by practicing only and determination to get cured I was able to succeed.
In conclusion, it was very important to overcome my fear, because it was consuming my energy to live a normal life-like everybody else. Thus by medical help, having faith in God and fighting the negativity in me I got what I have wanted.
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...live a normal life-like everybody else. Thus by medical help, having faith in God an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, if, look, so, then, thus, well, for instance, i feel, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 87.0 43.0788530466 202% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2101.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 486.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.32304526749 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46341329326 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526748971193 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 666.9 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.8469624029 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.8076923077 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6923076923 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.65384615385 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118351398359 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0341035646418 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0369818295353 0.0737576698707 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0682256798496 0.150856017488 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0208702544065 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.78 10.9000537634 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.06 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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