Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? When people succeed, it is entirely because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with their success. Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position.
Some people say that in order to succeed we have to work hard to accomplish all our goals. However, others think otherwise. They state that everything comes by chance and luck plays the major role in our lives. In my opinion, we only have success in life throughout hard work and luck does not exist in life and I will demonstrate this in this article.
we merely may succeed in the university through studying hard and there is no chance in obtaining success by luck. For instance, unless we study by sharing knowledge around our classmates , it is not possible to get good grades. When I was at my first year in the college, I was failing every time because I was thinking that what I was studying was enough to be good. However, after realizing that the way to study was being wrong, I started pushing myself hard enough and then, my grades began improving. Therefore, those instances illustrate the desideratum of pushing hard to succeed.
Moreover, if we do not pressure ourselves hard enough at work, we may not receive the expected money for survivor. We can even get fired if we do not work properly. For example, last year one of my colleagues started becoming lazy for work. Our boss saw that situation happening and adviced him to push hard otherwise he could suffer the consequences and as he did not care, he end up fired. Hence, this another example elucidates the necessity to get the things done accordingly.
Finally, I strongly believe that it is only by working hard that we can get at success in life be it while a student in the university, or be it at work with our co-workers and boss.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1322.0 1977.66487455 67% => OK
No of words: 289.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57439446367 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55159365929 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567474048443 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 419.4 618.680645161 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6910268093 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.1333333333 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2666666667 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.8 5.45110844103 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161345108817 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0550881046667 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.040988821736 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100704985091 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0154630235601 0.0645574589148 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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