Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.
It is crystal clear that helping communities plays and important role in different societies. These days, many people hold the opinion that youth do not allocate sufficent amount of time to help their communities. I, personally speaking, agree with this statement. The reasons to substantiate my view are elaborated upon in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, today's youth give so much time to work with new technologies that they do not have enough free time anymore. Teenagers often use the internet to watch their favorite movies. In addition, young people always follow celebrities and pay attention to their personal lives in social networks. For instance, last year I suggested my cousin to join my group in order to save our hometown environment by collecting recycleabe materials. He agreed at first, but he never came to help me. I asked him about the reason, and he stated that Although he wanted to join, he prefer to watch NBA basketball competitions and relavant analysis programs. Therefore, he do not have enough time for this activity.
Second, today's youth have less sense of reponsibility in comparison to previous generations. The last generations considered the city as their home, and the neighbors as their family. Moreover they have a very strong relationship with each other in the society. Conversely, today's young people rarely know their neighbors due to increase in populity. Moreover, today's lifestyle persuade the youth to spend their time alone, rather that to make fiends, or to help others. My own experience can clearly demonstrate this. My uncle and his friends had a group in which, they talked to the people to quit smoking. They tried to warn the people in the city that smoking caused many phisycal disease. Last year he talked about his group to his son and recommended that his son made a similar group with his neighbors. However, his son refused and considered that the he did not responsible about others lives.
To conclude, having considered the mentioned reasons, I strongly agree that today's young people rarely give sufficent time to help their community. This is because they put their time on using different technologies and also, they don not feel responsible about others in a communities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: prefers
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Suggestion: does
...lavant analysis programs. Therefore, he do not have enough time for this activity....
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Suggestion: Moreover,
...ome, and the neighbors as their family. Moreover they have a very strong relationship wi...
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Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'he'?
Suggestion: the; he
...er, his son refused and considered that the he did not responsible about others lives....
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a community' or simply 'communities'?
Suggestion: a community; communities
...on not feel responsible about others in a communities.
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ponsible about others in a communities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, for instance, in addition, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 15.1003584229 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1887.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 370.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75437231273 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556756756757 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.2388203065 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.0434782609 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0869565217 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04347826087 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31085091834 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0847409815083 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0794233031246 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21091670447 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0678245180631 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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