Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people today are less dependent on their parents than in the past.
Parents, as we all know, are our wealth. Although it may seem exaggerated, at first sight, one may find debating about the role of parents in children`s life sensible. In this regard, many people support this opinion that nowadays, young people are less dependent on their parents than before. Contrary to common belief, I believe that the dependency that happens today is remarkable, and children are enduring more and more affiliation rather than before. I will delve into two conspicuous reasons to bear in mind.
The first reason that makes me hold the belief that the attachment of children to their parents is noticeable is the education issue. Undoubtedly, as long as human beings have been become developed, education achieves a higher position among people. In fact, the more developed society has, the more educated people it has. To illustrate, these day`s people do not look at education as a tool of higher information; conversely, they seize this opportunity as a way that brings better situations to their children in future life. Based on an experiment that has been conducted recently, results showed that nowadays, despite the competition that is existed for better universities among people, unlike the previous generation, parents plan their children`s future education from their infancy, and it is going to become widespread. So, only if parents let children can feel authority.
Another equally noteworthy reason to bear in mind is the network issue. Regarding the new rules that control human beings` communities, networks, and money emanated from it have been the most important parts of people`s life. As we all know, human inborn with the natural instinct to seek superior positions, try to find a situation that shows their superiority in somehow. Therefore, young people try to attach themselves to their family’s networks that had been built before to value themselves. Indeed, if children show they are dependent on their family, they can gain the best results from the advantageous of these attachments. Take my personal experience as an example, a couple of years ago, one of the friends of mine had a famous and wealthy family, while all of us were in the same situation at that time we eventually understood that she could find a superior job that we had never could think about it. When I talked to her, she asserted that her boss is one of her father`s friends. Thus, the favorable benefits of affiliation to the family play an encouragement role for young people to claim their dependency proudly.
To summarize, contemplating all remarks, we can safely conclude that dependency is not only enforced by parents but also welcomed by young people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, first, if, look, may, regarding, so, therefore, thus, while, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2305.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 441.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22675736961 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89611863524 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548752834467 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 711.0 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.3287457183 48.9658058833 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.25 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.05 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20888919983 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0618000037231 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0680743490304 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132402313112 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0426077912429 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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