Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.Use specific reasons and examples to support your an
No one can deny that there are both positive and negative aspects of social activities and sports in the colleges and universities. If I were forced to choose, I would decide that it is really necessary to invest same amount of money on the social activities and sports. Even though, some people might think that it would be better for students to focus on their classes and their academic performances but In my firm belief sports and social activities are as important as the classes and libraries to get financial support for three reasons and, I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, I think to have a better academic performances, students need to have some fun. It would be so boring and dull for students to only study their lessons without doing anything joyful. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. You see, when I was master student at university of Tehran in Iran, I was really busy with all sort of exams. I was tired and I did not enjoy anything. I was not engaged in any fun activity. At that time I offered to some football team in the university so I could train with them like 4 days a week. I was much happy that I could play football. It was really consenting at that time and beside that, my concentration was improved so I could study better than before. As a result of this participation, my grade enhanced and I was much happier person than before.
Secondly, social activities and sports are really good opportunities to meet new people. I think there are many possible ways to contract with people and make some friends, but in my firm opinion social activities and sport are the best ones. For instance, when I was part of theater group I met so many people. Some of them now are my best friends and I think making a friend was one of the beneficial aspects of being on that specific group.
Finally, most of the social activities and sports value the importance of team work. It is so vivid that in some sports like football your performance is important as the other members of team. So you have to try to be good team player in order to help your team scores. I think this example could easily show us how much is important to invest some money on these kind of activities.
In the light of above mentioned reasons, I strongly reckon that universities and colleges should invest the same amount of money into social activities and sport as the put in classes and libraries. I think some of the most important reasons are the fact that these type of activities could improve the performance of the students and also I could make some good chances to meet some new people. As a final reasons I believe that these kind of activities could learn students the value of working as a team other than working as an individuals.
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...ople. As a final reasons I believe that these kind of activities could learn students the ...
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Suggestion: an individual; individuals
...working as a team other than working as an individuals.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, really, second, secondly, so, for instance, i think, kind of, sort of, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2352.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 516.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55813953488 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76609204519 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56493986898 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.437984496124 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 746.1 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.3643451606 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04166666667 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208539140519 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0570187317828 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049586874507 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123942949745 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0447146885177 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.16 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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