Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The statement is about universities and colleges funding priorities. There is a lot of differing opinions about whether sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries hence should acquire equal financial support from colleges and universities. Personally, I believe that sports and social activities hold just as significant as academics, thereby the external activities should receive equal financial support. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, I think extracurricular activities prepare students for future job opportunities. In today's world, job employer's only doesn't look for degrees graduates acquire. Before hiring they look for more such as leadership qualities, team-playing abilities, whether are able to work outside of their comfort zone. Sports provides all of that along with other social activities such as different types of clubs. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. While I was studying in high school, my high school had several clubs such as earth club, science club, debate club, language. I was a member of a language club where I not only excelled at a language which not my native tongue but also provided me with self-confidence. I was very weak at communicating in English, partly due to my fear of saying wrong sentences or so on. Club used to organize various events and workshops that helped me to overcome this fear. This has resulted in confidence about myself. In contrast, my university did not have any kind of other social activities or sports events. Due to that, many students do not have anything else to offer to the employee other than their academic degrees. That's why many of our graduates are unemployed.
Secondly, extracurricular activities are a great way to socialize with new people. Meeting new people helps to built network and also makes a unknown place easier to survive. By building a strong network it can beneficial one later in life. For instance, in my university I was only acquinted with people took my major. In my final year of thesis, I needed to collaborate with someone who can provide me some information that was not in my major. It was a task of great difficulty as i didnot know any people outside my classroom. My high school was a big school consisting about more than thousands of people in my year. But through participating in different club events I met a lot of people and through that network I was able to land my internship while many of univesity classmates didnot get any opportunities even after passing for a year.Also meeting new people I made a lot of new friends which made my high school time of sweet memory.
In conclusion, I am in the opinion of receiving equal financial support in sports and social activities as in classes and libraries. This is because it a great new way to met new people and built strong network and also it helps a student better prepare for facing upcoming difficulties in life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, look, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, in contrast, kind of, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2510.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 506.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9604743083 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7428307748 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8768112925 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501976284585 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 791.1 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2964912277 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.962962963 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7407407407 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195834688405 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0610546450665 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0962784493861 0.0737576698707 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1665914491 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.13705354565 0.0645574589148 212% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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