Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
Developing and popularity technology and electronic devices like, Cell phones, Tablets, and computers become a big problem for teenagers. They spend much time on these devices, playing games, chatting, searching in websites, and so on. Parents and school teachers are concerned if these hobbies take the students away from their education staffs, also they think it is more difficult to educate them. In my way of thinking, spending time on such devices has nothing to do with educational matters.
First off, always teenagers have some hobbies to spend their time. In the past, they usually went out and play physical games like soccer, riding bicycle, and so on. Today their behaviors are changed because of technological progress. They spend most of the time on computers. In conclusion, electronic hobbies do not occupy students time, it takes time as much as what was in the past, just the kind of activities is changed, so it is not recommended to states, in the past students had more free time but now it is occupied by computers.
The second reason that can be stated here is that there are many benefits of playing online games and online social networking websites. I think playing video games improve the teenager’s mind. When they play different and difficult games, they learn how to solve problems in the game. It involves their mind, so it makes their brain stronger that results in more ability to learn educational staffs. In addition, there are much suitable information on the internet around many different fields like biology, history, math, music. It is very instructive for students to enhance acknowledge that can help them in education.
Finally, today parents are very concerned about their children's education. They are very cautious and aware. They would not let their teenagers spoil their time on electronic devices. For this purpose, they put limit time on students to spend on cell phones and computer hobbies. Furthermore, all of the today's students are smart and know how instructive such devices could be.
To summarize, it depends on the students that what effect cell phone, computers, and other similar devices have for them. If they use them in right way, it will be beneficial for them, but if they use in the wrong way it would be dangerous.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 479, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...able information on the internet around many different fields like biology, history, math, mus...
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Line 7, column 294, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ones and computer hobbies. Furthermore, all of the todays students are smart and know how ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, second, so, i think, in addition, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1922.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 381.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04461942257 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60878657412 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535433070866 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 589.5 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.6488774634 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.3636363636 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3181818182 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.54545454545 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282917206144 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0806573478347 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0539623673824 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15502479159 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0638333681194 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.