TPO 34. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.

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TPO 34. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.

By passing the time, the people behavior and their way of living change because of emerging new facilities and devices. In the past, the electronic devices very limited to televisions, video players, and simple video games. However, today there are more complicated devices like tablets, cell phones, which in spite of their small size, they have various applications, also they take a lot of time from their consumers. Now there is a debate about whether these new facilities have made the educating more difficult nowadays or not. In my way of thinking such new electro devices have not had a harsh influence on the education.

The first reason which should be stated here is that people always have some hobby in their life each of which wastes their time in some ways. In different ages the hobbies change; for example, one hundred years ago most hobbies were occupied by physical activities because there were no electronic devices. In that age, children played soccer, hide and cheek, baseball, and so on. However, today, they mostly spend their time on their cell phones and laptops, checking their emails, their facebook pages, and so on. Always the children time is occupied with some entertainments, but the devices are different. Therefore, it does not make a sense to say it is hard to educate children because they waste their time on the online games and the cell phones.

The other point which deserves some words here is that the new electronic devices have provided a field to make education easier. In the past, it was difficult for students to search on their class projects since they had to go to the central library of a big city to find the needed materials for research. Also, if they had any problem with their courses, they could not solve it easily. In contrast, nowadays, new facilities like internet, have made their work more convenient. They can search any particular subject on the internet and receive a bunch of information. They can use additional tutoring videos, which are uploaded on the internet, to learn more about their studies and problems.

To summarize, educating children is not more difficult task today. It is a right statement that they spent a lot of time on the cell phones and the internet, but in the past, they do other activities instead which took their time as much as today. Also, the new facilities have made the learning and researching more easy for the students.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 518, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[1]
Message: The adverb 'Always' is usually not used at the beginning of a sentence.
...mails, their facebook pages, and so on. Always the children time is occupied with some...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, therefore, as to, for example, in contrast, in spite of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2020.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87922705314 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48799774757 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497584541063 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 635.4 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.5771786774 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.0 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237262050288 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0823301646798 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0747570559837 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174402207568 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0817627843625 0.0645574589148 127% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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