Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
In today's fast-paced and education-oriented world, education (1) as a matter of developing levels of different people's knowledge in any ages is of paramount pivotal importance to the society. A question that may arise here is whether does electronic devices which many children use it every day have a negative effects on education (2) and make it more complex or not. I am personally of the opinion that these tools make the education easy and have positive effects on children's mind. Two of the most predominant reasons in support of my contention would be elaborated in the following paragraphs:
The first focal point that prompts me to hold this idea is that, utilizing some electronic devices makes education easy and cost-effective. As a matter of fact, students in schools can use some devices such as tablets instead of paper to write on them or see the materials which the teachers write on the board in their tablets. For instance, if a teacher wants to take give a quiz (3), write the question on the board and instantly will show in the tablets of the students, and after a moment, they can send their answers to the teacher's computer without any wasting the time. Besides, use of these electronic gadgets (4) enable (5) some children who have a poor family to continue their study at home because they have access to all online materials for their education with the lowest expenditure. As a case in point, there is a body of education researches (6) which I read recently. The researchers conducted an interview whit with successful education's administers; the data denoted that host of them make their systems of education modern with electronic devices. On balance, this finding can at least partly explain why using electronic tools is intrinsic to becoming an accomplished country in fields of education in the world.
The undeniable role of electronic apparatus to make children more (7) smarter should not be underestimated when this issue delved into. Nobody can cast doubt on the fact that current generation are is extensively smarter than past ones. And, the invention of the electronic tools have has (8) a significant role in this jumping. Children learn work with these devices in at younger ages and it makes their mind entail whit the processing of these tools and being enthusiastic of about how they work. One of the startling facts which astounded me is that some people erroneously think working with some electronic gadgets makes children lazy. Against this notion, (9) new electronic tools and even games flourish some ability of the children. To take a personal experience as an example, last year, I attended in a colloquium. Within the scope of discussions, a university lecturer asserted the important effects of some online games on the mind of the children by showing some relevant statistics which revealed that most of the astute and accomplished children have an experience of playing with some online games due to the aforementioned reason.
Thoroughly analyzing the reasons, discretely put, I reiterate that new electronic devices such as phones, tablets or online games and websites have a significant effects on the education of children. To recapitulate, not only can electronic tools make education more easy easier (10), but also it changes the mental processing of them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 529, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teachers'' or 'teacher's'?
Suggestion: teachers'; teacher's
...ent, they can send their answers to the teachers computer without any wasting the time. ...
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Line 4, column 163, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...e games and websites have a significant effects on the education of children. To recapi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, may, so, thus, at least, for instance, such as, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2757.0 1977.66487455 139% => OK
No of words: 550.0 407.700716846 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01272727273 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84273464058 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8891641389 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 212.727598566 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505454545455 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 887.4 618.680645161 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.1843227832 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.85 100.406767564 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.9 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13712768674 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0457197761776 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0270059305399 0.0737576698707 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0922033169046 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00798491382522 0.0645574589148 12% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 86.8835125448 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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