Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Whether the ability communicating with others or hardworking in school is more important for career success has aroused a heated debate today. Some people claim that the society today is a “relationship society”, so relating well to people is more important to the success career, while others hold that only by hard study can someone reach success in career. I definitely agree with the second argument that hardworking plays a key role in one’s career success.
It is obvious that diploma is quite important today in career life, and hard studies in school is inevitable to get the satisfying diploma. Because of the heavy competitive pressure nowadays, a large amount of famous companies set a high standard for the job applicants. Only the graduates from high-ranked universities have the opportunities to get the job. Besides, the ones holding high and famous diploma is more easily to acquire trust from clients and partners, which is significantly helpful for the career development.
Secondly, we can obtain the abilities of solving problems by hard work in school, which is quite necessary when stepping into work. Take me as an example, I was major in computer science, I usually had to finish a lot of hard programs in daily studies. At first I found writhing the codes was extremely difficult in a short time, but with daily hard practice, I found the process got much more easier. Thanks to the accumulation in school, my abilities have improved to a great extent, which helped me a lot even when I started working.
Admittedly, networking today is quite important for one’s career development. However, only when we get enough knowledge and are equipped with outstanding abilities can other excellent people pay attention to us. As a saying goes. ’Opportunities are prepared for the ones have prepared.” Hard work in school is such preparation.
In conclusion, I believe hardworking in school is the fundamental factor leading to career success. It is difficult to achieve success in career life without making great efforts in school.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 188, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... people claim that the society today is a 'relationship society', so re...
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Line 5, column 390, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
... practice, I found the process got much more easier. Thanks to the accumulation in school, ...
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Line 7, column 219, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...r excellent people pay attention to us. As a saying goes. 'Opportunities are ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, in conclusion, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1759.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21958456973 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07827998382 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548961424332 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.3901797076 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.470588235 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8235294118 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94117647059 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244166688422 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.076234367869 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0499700681456 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132233320424 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0557939912901 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.