Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children (five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
When it comes to financial support, many governments assure that they are spending their money in the right place. Spending money on universities is not more important than spending money on kid’s education who are less than ten years old. For that, I personally encourage authorities to spend much money on teaching young children instead of teaching adults.
First, young kids are considered to be the future of any country. When those kids get educated very well, later on, they can fix the country as well. Country’s mistakes like old broken roads, bad investments, or even low economic status. As an example, Rajab Ordugan, the Turkish president, studied his entire childhood in a distinguished private school in the Great Britain. His parent sent him there because of the high reputation of the education system over there. Ordugan learned many sophisticated subjects like economy, communication skills when he was only six years old. Turkey was known for its high poverty rate with no transportation services. When Ordugan became a president, he fixed the economy in Turkey and established the public transportation system. Now, Turkey announces to be one of the richest countries worldwide and all this because of Ordugan’s solid education.
Secondly, supporting kid’s learning might help the country in limiting the number of homeless. The journey of being homeless usually begins during childhood. Many kids who did not complete their school and education, they end up in the street without a home to shelter. Imagine if the country spent more money on education, many kids would attend schools and as a result, fewer kids would be future homeless. In contrary, spending money on universities without the care for school and pre-school education, the number of people who would attend universities would be less because many kids did not attend school at the beginning. Therefore, these group of kids when they grow up, universities would not accept them because of their low education level. After that, these kids would be homeless wandering on the streets.
To wrap it up, we must motivate and support governments to finance young children’s education. This is not only because of fixing the community in the future but also to reduce the number of homeless people around.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1951.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25876010782 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83693202553 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5525606469 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 598.5 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.4762243446 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.9047619048 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.42857142857 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199149865931 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0604481340312 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0922648603182 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15161030277 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.153515736325 0.0645574589148 238% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.93 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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