Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children (five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities.
The development of the country, as we all know, is the most crucial factor for the government`s future planning. Although it may seem exaggerated, at first sight, noticing the world is ruled now, one may find this contention sensible. In this regard, some people are inclined toward this opinion that for the successful development of a country, the government should spend money on children rather than universities. I am of the opinion that, the country successful development just relied on children`s education. I will delve into two conspicuous reasons to elaborate on my standpoint.
The first reason which makes me hold this belief is the very fact that human resources are the wealth of a society and children are the most important part of this treasure. Regarding the modern era and the developments which are happened during this period, the attitudes toward education modified. Whereas, many critics debate that spending money on universities, since train students to be experts in their major, would be a beneficial factor for the government to gain human resources with a high level of expertise. On the other hand, no one can cast a shadow on this fact that there is no way to train a successful student in adulthood unless prepared them from childhood. Thus, if there is enough investment, for training, on children who live within a country, the government can expect to have a successful student who can be reliable for the government as a human resource in near future.
Another equally noteworthy reason to bear in mind is that you reap what you sow. If the government does not invest enough money in children, it would not be possible to have great scientists who can change the country or even the world. The government is responsible for every member of society, especially children. Undoubtedly, children are born with different gifted abilities, it is the government`s job to know, invest, improve and train these abilities to the right path and use them in the future as scientists or expertise in the country or even in the world. Based on an experiment which is conducted on two different schools with different level of time spending on children and the different level of structures about training student based on their gifted abilities, which I had recently read an article about, results show that children who are exposed to distinguish training achieved better scores and show better performance on a specific ability. Indeed, spending time to know children`s talents provide guidelines for teachers to teach them based their ability.
To summarize, all contemplated remarks we safely conclude that it is true that spending money on universities is beneficial for the government, but society will never have a reliable human resource unless trained him from childhood. In fact, the responsibility of government to each member of the community children, in particular, requires the government to invest in children to know their talents, improve it and direct it in the right way for the future.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, regarding, so, thus, whereas, in fact, in particular, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2570.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 498.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16064257028 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97715870861 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475903614458 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 785.7 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.3360322624 48.9658058833 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.777777778 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6666666667 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.77777777778 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291003346754 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0958351351573 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0727184680583 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188995171148 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0290245143826 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 11.7677419355 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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