Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
These days, people spend a lot of time at work and it is important for us to be happy with our jobs. However, I personally think that it is better to have a secure job at the moment rather than waiting for the one that would be more enjoyable. There are a few reasons why I hold this stance.
First of all, a stable job helps parents feel financially protected. People, who have children are responsible for them and have to provide them with a safe home and healthy food. To afford this, parents have to be employed. My own experience is a compelling example of this. For my husband and me, our kids are the first priority and when we make any decisions, we always think how they can affect our children. In this way, when recently my spouse lost his well-paid job, he was looking for new opportunities. Unfortunately, he could not find a company, which would pay him the same salary that he had before. However, he did not hesitate and accepted an offer form a firm, which guaranteed him a stable income, so we could continue paying our house lone and school bills with no delay. By doing this, my husband insured shelter, education, and meals for our family. This example illustrates my argument.
Secondly, an employment that may look not satisfying at first can become the beginning of an astonishing career. Nobody knows what exactly is going to happen in the future, and life sometimes brings us surprises. For example, after graduating a college I could not find a job in a pharmacy, which could be located close to my house. Nevertheless, I found one, which was at a long distance from my residence and decided to take it. At first, I was frustrated because I did not have a personal vehicle and had to use a train to commute. However, after six months of the employment, I was offered a position of a pharmacy manager and got a chance to move to the next step in my career. To that end, sometimes jobs that seem not perfect for us can actually help us to excel.
To conclude, I strongly believe that when people get a job opportunity, they should appreciate it even if it is not really what they are looking for. This is because it can provide their families with a necessary income, and can contribute to a successful future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, really, second, secondly, so, well, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1835.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5085995086 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62650459779 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550368550369 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 586.8 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.8566936476 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.4090909091 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227144229159 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0650531995677 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.065520282434 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158616279902 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0688940153628 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.88 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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