Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.

All important abilities, behaviours any other skills are learned at early ages of human life especially at a young age,Because in that time human's learning performances are effective.

First of all, people's life lasts between birth to death, and in that time there are several different experiences such as fighting with others, paying bills to buy anything, marrying with partner etc.And, all of these facilities may cause problems for people, some of them effect badly and some of them impact positively.For example, some people and especially women who like shopping want to buy many things such like dresses, shoes, skirts and so on.Ant they may consume more money and this causes budget problems, for escaping from that problem they should improve their financial responsibilities.

Also, in a modern era like today there are several tools,materials and apps which are using for financial scheduling.For example, cellphones which is created by big companies are more functional for money controlling,Because they have different kind of software programs on them.And, these are used by people for their money consuming.But, these type of products are difficult to learn by old people, all young people learn them easily, and they use them effectively.So, these young members of communities' learning abilities are as important as financial responsibilities of them.This ability impacts their environments which especially about financial activities.

In addition, at the early age children do not have enough money, because they need their families budget for their interactions such as playing a game, going to the cinema, buying books etc.For this reason, they must to learn money's importance if they would not like to learn its greatness.

In conclusion, taking account of all these reasons, the financial part of all responsibilities should get at young age, because at that time learnings are learned clearly and obvisiously.So, I definitely and openly agree that statement.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1688.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 307.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4983713355 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10188720122 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.583061889251 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 515.7 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 20.6003584229 24% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 61.0 20.1344086022 303% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 198.013534891 48.9658058833 404% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 337.6 100.406767564 336% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 61.4 20.6045352989 298% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 20.4 5.45110844103 374% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241960815183 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.158446818883 0.076458572812 207% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0640443899698 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158446818883 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0640443899698 0.0645574589148 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 35.2 11.7677419355 299% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 1.1 58.1214874552 2% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 6.10430107527 260% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 28.3 10.1575268817 279% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.51 10.9000537634 142% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.78 8.01818996416 134% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.5 10.002688172 295% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 26.4 10.0537634409 263% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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