Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
When it comes to the issue that it is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs different from their parents’ jobs, some people may agree with this idea and give us sound reasons for their beliefs. On the other hand, some other people might disagree and have different opinions. Also, those opponents could provide us with strong purposes to support their thoughts. I believe that it is better for children to choose jobs’ similar to their parents’ jobs because there are so many reasons support my point of view in the following paragraph:
First of all, in my opinion, it is widely understood that the child will get a lot of information from his parent, if he chose job similar to their jobs. The parents can depend on their own experience in their jobs to help their children. Eventually, the child will be more able to overcome any obstacle in his work and that will make him more comfortable and less stressful. For instance, the doctor can discuss with his son about his patients’ ca
ses to increase his son knowledge and improve his ability in the diagnosis and by that he will be more talent in his job.
Another point why I advocate that the child whom chose job similar to his parent job will get a lot of benefits. The life today is very hard and the competitions between the people for the job increase. If the parent work in the same field of their children, the can help their children to get a good job easily. The work today need to build good relationships with other people. So, the child can depend on his parent’s popularity. However, the child whom chose different job than his parent’ job will suffer to improve himself in his new career.
Finally, it is a well-established fact that life today is very expensive and the technology develop rapidly. Starting new job need a lot of money and a long time to work easily. If the child has same job of his parent, he can work under his parent’s work name. Eventually, he can depend on his parent costumer at the beginning of his job. For instant, if the child work in his parent’s restaurant he does not need to rent place, buy new furniture. Moreover, if his parent’s restaurant reputation is good, his work will start with large number of costumer.
From what has been discussed above, we may draw a conclusion, which says that people who hold opposite idea may have the right to believe in that, but my opinion and other people opinions are overwhelmingly too much to be ignored.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 128, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to job'
Suggestion: to job
...nformation from his parent, if he chose job similar to their jobs. The parents can ...
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Line 4, column 75, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...and improve his ability in the diagnosis and by that he will be more talent in hi...
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Line 5, column 56, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to job'
Suggestion: to job
...hy I advocate that the child whom chose job similar to his parent job will get a lo...
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Line 7, column 201, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'jobbed'.
Suggestion: jobbed
...e to work easily. If the child has same job of his parent, he can work under his pa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, well, for instance, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2118.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 450.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70666666667 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6932013169 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.448888888889 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 647.1 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.2598609188 48.9658058833 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.9 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.45658326422 0.236089414692 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.163600310946 0.076458572812 214% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.154058962333 0.0737576698707 209% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.248554949434 0.150856017488 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.206331070485 0.0645574589148 320% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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