Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.Use specific reasons and examples to support you

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Choosing a Job has always been an inevitable part of people's lives since it influences other parts of life. Therefore, people should pay attention to what sort of profession they choose. Some people believe it is better to track parents’ jobs while others look at the concept of choosing job and they mooted people should occupy the jobs according to their interests and professions. In my perspective, I firmly agree that it would be a great idea that people follow their parents' jobs due to following reasons:
The first point should be mentioned is that, if people continue their father's work, they will have enough experience to start their works individually. Since they are familiar with different parts of a given job as well as all circumstances. Hence, people could become prosperous in a short of time. For instance, my father's friend took a job similar to his own father in market. He knew all the ups and downs in his career as he has raised with this kind of job that knew its circumstances, rules, bans. He also knew his own strongpoints that could lead him to prosperity. Consequently, he exceled other competitors and he became the most successful person in his expertise in just five years after he started his job. As you see, he chose a job that was similar to his father's and got a wealthy person at young age.
Additionally, other people know the one who follow a similar job to his father's and they could trust and work with him/her according to his father credential. As people hear this person's name they remember his father's and they become eager to deal with him. For example, my brother was interested in my father's job. He always wanted to be a pilot and eventually he became a pilot in an educational institution. Now, when people hear about my brother, first they thought he is my father and after they found they would like to participate in his classes because they know my father was one of qualified commanders of my country. Therefore, choosing a job similar to the parent's one or track theirs would bring about remarkable result.
To sum up, according to all aforementioned reasons, I strongly believe that if people continue their parents' jobs or even choose similar to them could be prosperous easily not only do they know the circumstances of their careers, but they also other people know them and trust the accuracy of their services.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 294, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to job'
Suggestion: to job
... others look at the concept of choosing job and they mooted people should occupy th...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...parents jobs due to following reasons: The first point should be mentioned is t...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd got a wealthy person at young age. Additionally, other people know the one ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s would bring about remarkable result. To sum up, according to all aforemention...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, if, look, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, kind of, sort of, as well as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1972.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76328502415 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68330853503 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485507246377 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 598.5 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.3769496422 48.9658058833 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.555555556 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94444444444 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274347002971 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104707710777 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0949492824796 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198646632703 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0711334627174 0.0645574589148 110% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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