Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parent’s job.
All children have a dream about their future work; some of them prefer to follow their parents' footsteps and some of them think differently, both of these preferences have their advantages and disadvantages. However, I strongly believe that having a job similar to their parents is more beneficial. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, the similarity between children’s job and their parents actually helps them to learn more from their parents about the occupation. Having knowledge and experience about a job is valuable which learning them requires a lot of time and work. Youth learns from their parents in their childhood in which parents have not only had a great impact on children to choose their future jobs, they have also had a chance to convey their experiences and to make interested in their own occupation. My own experience while I was an adult is a good example of this. When I was eighteen, my mother who has been a teacher, took me in her class once in which I have learned a lot about teaching; she has taught me her experiences and showed me some brilliant aspects of being a tutor. For example, in her class some students avoided hard work; she taught me how to handle them, she gently nudged them back to their important study by some techniques like asking questions and encouraging them to respond by giving them some empirical evidence on the subject. Moreover, students’ respect for my parents has always been fascinated me with their jobs. Choosing a job like parents’ is effective for children because they had learned more about them from their parents and had more chance for prosperous in their occupation.
Secondly, beginning a new job without any experiences has its risks and many unknown aspects which increases the probability of a failure. Many people at least once experience lost their passion for work which is due to their misunderstanding about their work and to have not a supporter who is helpful for managing their business. In some situation like mentioned previously having similarity with your families’ job is a superiority over others. For instance, a young farmer who his family have the same job has an excellent chance to have a proper farm, because he/she based on his/her families’ experiences knows when is an outstanding time to cultivate and which approach is better for their yield which cause to improve their work effectively, whereas others without any knowledge of farming and without family supporting have to spend more money and time to get skills for just starting their work.
To sum it up, I am of the opinion that having a similar job to their parents has more advantages for children. This is because they can use their parents’ experiences to learn more about their work, and because the risks of the job are lower and they have opportunities to improve their business and get more support from their family.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, whereas, while, at least, for example, for instance, i feel, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 75.0 43.0788530466 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2477.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 503.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92445328032 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73578520332 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78229035926 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.455268389662 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 763.2 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 94.2295290885 48.9658058833 192% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.705882353 100.406767564 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5882352941 20.6045352989 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94117647059 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.369531971889 0.236089414692 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.167345634145 0.076458572812 219% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118599506449 0.0737576698707 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.273336899922 0.150856017488 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0468705068018 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 11.7677419355 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.85 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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