Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
It goes without saying that different events have been happening all around of the globe that most of them have not associated with a vast majority of people. In this regard, I think it is not essential to know about all the events that happen around the world. The reasons to support my viewpoint are elaborated on in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, knowing about all the events which occur all around the globe require to allocate a great deal of time. Considering the importance of the time in humans' lives, there are other useful ways people can use their time. To be more specific, nowadays, individuals have been engaged in various issues which should be fulfilled to improve the quality of their life. Therefore, using their precious time to complete their tasks rather than knowing about events would be more beneficial for them. Besides, most of the news which have been published in a wide variety of sources are attractive and people may be encouraged to know more about these kinds of news. Therefore, it is no secret to anyone that they will lose great deal of their time if they follow various events in different fields.
Moreover, people lose their concentration from their main tasks. To put it in other words, everyone are trying to do their best to prepare a better environment for themselves and their loved ones. In this matter, they must put all their efforts and energies to deals with their basic challenges. Having a good concentration on our tasks is a very effective way to complete them in an excellent fashion. When people read a wide array of news like emotional one, these kinds of events may influence their performance. An example can shed some light on this issue. A few years ago, I have read a news on the Internet. This news was about a catastrophic earthquake in one of the city in Iran that near 300 people were died. Therefore, I affected by this news and I could not concentrate on my assignments. Because I always thought about children who lost their parents.
In conclusion, contemplating all the reasons and points, I do believe that it is not vital to know about various happenings which have been happening all around the world. This is because individuals need to allocate a great deal of their times to read and follow the news, and they will be affected by some of these news.
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...hich occur all around the globe require to allocate a great deal of time. Considering the i...
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...s a very effective way to complete them in an excellent fashion. When people read a wide array of news ...
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...his issue. A few years ago, I have read a news on the Internet. This news was about a ...
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...ould not concentrate on my assignments. Because I always thought about children who los...
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Message: Did you mean 'this news' or 'these newses'?
Suggestion: this news; these newses
...s, and they will be affected by some of these news.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, i think, in conclusion, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1933.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71463414634 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54964275297 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475609756098 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 600.3 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.6441215541 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0476190476 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5238095238 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57142857143 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199708682641 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0650256446098 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0654624022918 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159032516222 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0655595987573 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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