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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is more beneficial to travel in your own country rather than traveling to foreign countries.

Essay topics: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is more beneficial to travel in your own country rather than traveling to foreign countries.

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The world is changing at a rapid pace, so we have to change ourselves. To fulfill our personal and professional goal and to keep pace with the changing world we have to travel a lot. Some people travel within their own country and some people travel to foreign countries. A lot of people believe that they benefit more when they travel within their own country. Others disagree. In my view, people get more advantage when they visit foreign countries because of two reasons.

First, When people visit to any foreign country, they can learn new things and new culture, as a result their knowledge is increased. Every country is different from others. They have different culture and custom. When someone travels outside from his native country he can explore these facts. This exploration in turns enhances his knowledge and enriches his mentality. For example, I was a very introvert boy from my childhood. I did not enjoy talking with new people and making new friends. I did not like travelling. When I finished my high school study, I made a plan to travel across my home country. I with my friends travelled a lot across our country. We went to many historical places and explored new foods. But when I returned from the trip I realized that I had not learned any new thing. So After my graduation I planned to visit Europe. I managed a travel group and joined with them. We travelled across Europe and discovered different customs and culture. I was very happy and excited. After completing my trip I realized my knowledge about world diversity and culture had greatly increased. So this example clearly illustrates that travelling abroad can greatly increase our depth of knowledge.

The second reason why I advocate this point of view lies in the fact that people can improve their financial condition travelling to foreign countries. We know that there are under-developed countries, Developing countries and developed countries. There is not enough job in developing and developed countries. People from these countries move to developed countries. If they can manage a job in foreign countries then their living condition improves and they become financially independent. For instance, I had a cousin who lived in a developing country. He graduated from a engineering university but did not able to manage a good job. After a few years he travelled to Europe and Managed a job there. Then his living condition was improved and he became financially solvent. So this experience clearly illustrates that travelling a foreign country can improve our financial condition.

In Sum, I strongly believes that people get more benefit when they travel foreign countries. Travelling foreign countries not only increases our knowledge but also financially helps us. So, everyone should be aware of this fact and try to travel as many foreign countries as possible.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...d that I had not learned any new thing. So After my graduation I planned to visit Europe...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...a developing country. He graduated from a engineering university but did not able...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, then, for example, for instance, as a result, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2410.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 475.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07368421053 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74868208158 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.450526315789 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 741.6 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 36.0 20.6003584229 175% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.481147484 48.9658058833 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 66.9444444444 100.406767564 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.1944444444 20.6045352989 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5 5.45110844103 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 18.0 4.88709677419 368% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243449257876 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0669092238843 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0680754494182 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188189629655 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0593193695562 0.0645574589148 92% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.24 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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