At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
Sports and Social activities are an integral part of any university or college. Sports and social interactions help a person in many ways. People become both physically and socially active if they take part in these kinds of activities. Some people believe that At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are equally significant as classes and libraries and therefore should obtain equal financial support. Others disagree. In my view, Those activities are equally meaningful and should draw equal amount of funding as classes and libraries for two important reasons.
First, Involvement in sports and social activities widen our mind and that positively influence our future life and relations. If we actively take part in sports and social activities then it become easy for us to realize the ups and downs of our life and accept them accordingly. We do not become frustrated of any accidental or adverse situation. For example, from my early age i was a very nervous and introvert boy. I become afraid when I saw something is not going according to my plan. As a result I had to suffer great greatly in my childhood. My everyday life and study was also affected. I was totally frustrated and did not know that to do. But everything changed when I get admitted into karachi university, which is famous for its academics and co-curricular activities. I be friends with some great people there. They were good students as well as good sportsman. They encouraged me to attend various inter-University sports and clubs. I followed their recommendation and joined different clubs. As a result I began to think positively about my life and found a meaning of my life. I was no more afraid of wins and losses. That gave me a great boost, I secure good grades and our teachers began to appreciate my effort. My whole life was changed. I was no more an introvert and frustrated boy. As you can see, sports and social activities can help us to get a positive momentum.
Second, Sports and social activities help us to build a strong network. when we take part in various activities, we meet a variety of people and interact with them and as a result our communication power develop. For instance, I had a cousin who graduated from lahore university. His grades were good but unfortunately he did not get any job after his graduation. He tried and tried but in vain. At one time he became hopeless. Then he tried in a different way. He was a good athlete and debater. As a result He had strong network. He tried through that network and managed a decent job. This experience taught me that Sports and social activities are very important if we want to maintain a decent network.
In sum, I strongly believe that all universities and colleges should treat sports and social activities as important as classes and libraries and therefore grant equal amount of funding for them. Those activities not only decisively shape our life but also help us to keep up a strong and effective social network. That's why every educational institution should careful about them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, if, second, so, then, therefore, well, as to, for example, for instance, as a result, as well as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 44.0 13.8261648746 318% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2562.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 525.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78673985869 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81917245541 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460952380952 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 821.7 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 23.0 9.59856630824 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 38.0 20.6003584229 184% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.3722628957 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.4210526316 100.406767564 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.8157894737 20.6045352989 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.65789473684 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309440732274 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0651229020057 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118672873347 0.0737576698707 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.244673639545 0.150856017488 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.184783472826 0.0645574589148 286% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 11.7677419355 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.43 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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