Agree or disagree: It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends.
Friends are an important part of our life. We cannot live without friends. Every people must have some friends, whether they may be old or new friends. Some people believe that it is more important to keep old friends than making new friends. others disagree. In my view, it is more important to make new friends than maintaining old friends for two significant reasons.
First, If we make new friends we can acquire new ideas. When we try to be friends with new people and share our feelings with them, we learn about many new information. As a result our knowledge develops and new idea is generated. For Example, From my early age I wanted to be an entrepreneur. I tried many different things in my childhood but none was successful. Then I get admitted into lahore university. I made a lot of new friends there. They were full of energy and new ideas. I Shared my dream with them, They were very much helpful. They consider my matter seriously and tried to help me by presenting their thoughts in different perspective. I found that their thinking and ideas was completely different from my old childhood friends. I follow their suggestion and now I am a proud entrepreneur. As you can see, new friends help us to generate new ideas.
Second, Making new friends helps us to create a strong network which helps us to secure better future. Now a days maintaining a good network helps us in many ways. Good communication skill and network is a prerequisite in many job and business. For instance, I had a cousin who was a very brilliants student. He always secured good grades in exams. He graduated from a reputed university. After graduation he tried heart and soul to manage a job. but he did not find any job. He tried and tried, but in vain. As a result he was frustrated. In his last attempt he communicated with his university friends any seek help from them. They took his matter seriously and tried to help them. After a few days, one of his friends called him in his office. His boss was impressed and my cousin got his dream job. This experience taught me that making new friend help us many ways in our future journey.
Insum, I strongly believe that is more necessary to make new friends than keeping old friends. New friends not only help us with new ideas but also help us to build a strong network base. That's why every person should aware to this fact.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Others
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... our feelings with them, we learn about many new information. As a result our knowledge develops and...
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...enerated. For Example, From my early age I wanted to be an entrepreneur. I tried ...
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Suggestion: many
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... skill and network is a prerequisite in many job and business. For instance, I had a cou...
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...y job. He tried and tried, but in vain. As a result he was frustrated. In his last...
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...help us to build a strong network base. Thats why every person should aware to this f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, then, for example, for instance, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1961.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58177570093 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55890512878 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478971962617 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 584.1 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 36.0 20.6003584229 175% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 20.1344086022 55% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.430867057 48.9658058833 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 54.4722222222 100.406767564 54% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 11.8888888889 20.6045352989 58% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.63888888889 5.45110844103 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 27.0 11.8709677419 227% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.337949863136 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0876905983924 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.138762197945 0.0737576698707 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.280128833629 0.150856017488 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.190010895956 0.0645574589148 294% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.1 11.7677419355 52% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.23 58.1214874552 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 10.1575268817 51% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.4 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.69 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.4 10.0537634409 64% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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