Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
With the accelerating development of our society, movies and television are becoming two vital roles in our daily life. Yet some advocates that the movies and television have more negative effects that positive ones, others think otherwise. From my perspective, I disagree that movies and television have more negative consequences.
First, with the arrivals of 21st century, due to increasing study stress on young people, entertainment has been a vital factor in their daily life. A man cannot work like a machine, which performs 24 hours without resting. Having proper rest will actually benefit youngster’s academic life. Furthermore, movies and television are the most common way for people to forget the heavy burden on their shoulders without questions. Thus no one can deny that televisions and movies act as an essential role for young individuals helping them relax themselves after hard study. For instance, I live in a city in the north of China, which is famous for its difficulty to attend universities due to the huge population in out province. Studying is becoming a daily for youngsters and almost everyone in school complains about the stress they are facing. In that case, our school has announced that they will hold a movie night on Friday after school to help student relax. That event is so successful that my friends are actually feel a bit relief from our study. Thus, movies and television are indeed playing positive side in our daily life.
Second, admittedly, there’re some scenes in the movies which are not appropriate for young people such as smoking and killing. Nevertheless, we cannot blame this to the movie or television themselves. If the government build the reasonable regulation and rating standard for film industry, then young folks will not get in touch with this inappropriate content. For instance, although now Chinese government has not release any rating standard for film, some movies editors themselves set up an award called Smoking Ash Award, which will be held every year to evaluate every film in the theater. The movie with most percentage of smoking scene will be awarded. It is not a positive honor but a kindly remind that maybe the director might consider less smoking scene in his next movie. Thus according to the example, everyone can see that young people can receive positive content from the movies.
Conclusively, since the movies and television can ensure both relaxation and positive contents, I pro for the standpoint that they have more positive effects than negative ones.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, furthermore, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, then, thus, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2151.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17067307692 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73825722924 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550480769231 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 669.6 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.0897519151 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.428571429 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8095238095 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.90476190476 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231448610072 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0754218133597 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0757674717591 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183761236631 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0810878181401 0.0645574589148 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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