Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The technology has become an inseparable part of human's daily life. Even though there are many advantages and disadvantages of using television and watching movies, I believe that cons outweigh the pros for the following reasons.
First of all, because considerable movies include a scene of a crime, people seem it as a normal thing. Many take the wrong imitation from those movies which causes some crimes in real life. Moreover, some nations like America allow people to obtain a gun to protect themselves in a dangerous situation, which gives a chance to some people who have a wrong mentality to do a crime. Take a look at a teenage girl as an example who kill two innocent young children. Her excuse was she tries to image the scene of a movie.
Furthermore, people, especially young children addicted to watching television. Because it entertains them and it is more interesting than play with toys for children. For example, my younger sister who is three years old addicted to a television show which dedicated to youths. If someone tries to turn off the television, she gets angry and shouts at them with the highest pitch that she could afford because she addicted it. There are also many people who addicted to television in the world and this problem has become one of pressing issues of worldwide. For example, I recently watched a show about the young Korean boy who addicted to the television, even though he is playing, eating, he always watches it from the morning till evening.
All in all, the negative impact of television and movies on the behaviour of people are awful and outweigh the positive ones.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 105, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun take seems to be countable; consider using: 'Many takes'.
Suggestion: Many takes
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, look, moreover, so, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1354.0 1977.66487455 68% => OK
No of words: 279.0 407.700716846 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85304659498 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61573122081 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5770609319 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 432.9 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4869662346 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.7142857143 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9285714286 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35714285714 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146503174348 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0485972955482 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.038538429496 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0927656159518 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0321587808146 0.0645574589148 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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