Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

I disagree with the statement that the part-time job could be a best way to make their children to get ready for adult life, and the reasons are as below.

Firstly, part-time job isn't a best way to experience adult life because it is just a tiny reflection of some jobs in modern society. some part-time jobs like shopkeeper, street cleaner, pizza deliver only requires such lower demands which can be taken place by illiterate people readily. If the children spend too much time and energy on these valueless works, they might pay less attention to their academic studying, and finally prevents from improving themselves substantially. Without the outstanding intelligence or diligence, those kids will lose their opportunities to achieve their grand dreams. Consequently, they will regret the wasted time period during the school.

Furthermore, there are so many replacements to help the children preparing for adult life. Most of them are valuable, easy-doing, and can cast a positive effect on children's development of disposition and personalities. For instances, working with a skillful professor in an university when taking extracurricular courses, can help us to build a systemic mechanism on learning particular objects, which are quite beneficial and lasting.

Admittedly, doing a part-time job might help us to develop a comprehensive recognition of the requisites of current working market. However, our society has witnessed and experienced radical changes in each and every aspects of life in an unprecedented speed. The collection of working situation when we build at early age would change rapidly or even vanished since growing up. Therefore, there is no reason that we should collect a working experience so early. but, the apex of our memory ability through the life, is definitely when we are young, especially the moment at primary school.

In a nutshell, allowing children to take a part-time job seems reasonable, but it is unnecessary for that they may waste of children's time which cannot recover after passed. Moreover, they are existing plenty of alternative ways that performs better.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1788.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 335.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33731343284 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98980818719 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.638805970149 0.524837075471 122% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.2075805808 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.75 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9375 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344032451859 0.236089414692 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102159692313 0.076458572812 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0971192104477 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204010634924 0.150856017488 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0987620754357 0.0645574589148 153% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.44 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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