Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Adolescence is a crucial span in human life that can shape his personality and pose a very profound effect on his future life. To the parent's consternation, many teenage children have difficulties facing the reality of adult life. Many of parents believe one of the best ways that they can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job, a notion which I certainly agree. There are some reasons for this, some of which are elaborated here.
Teenage years comprise a transient part of life, in which people are expriencing many alterations that happen in their appearance, characteristics, etc. The juvenile people feel ashamed of being children and like to be treated like adults. Anyway, they usually lack many features that are crucial prerequisite of being an adult, the most considerable of all is responsiblity. The parents are responsible for the children's every need in their early ages, and this makes the teenage children to be usually unfamiliar with the concept of responsiblity. As long as they can remember, the food had been ready for them, their had been cleaned, and so on. Now, there crave to be adults, but they are not ready for it, tending to elude responsiblities . Taking a part-time job can help teenage children participate in important social activities, in which they can learn responsiblity. For instnace , when you are working as a waitress in a restaurant, you have duties that you have to do on the right time., and there is no way to postpone anything. As you can see, teenage children can learn a lot from these jobs.
Alongside the reason discussed above, two of the most important things for the teenage is to feel that they are needed and respected in the society. By taking a part-time job they are appointed for some tasks that they are relied on. Take the mentioned restaurant job for instance. The part-time waiter would understand that if he does not do well, the restaurant's service would be disturbed. On the other hand, it is a widely held axiom that occupation, buys social respect people. The teenage who take part-time job obtain some respect along the society, not to mention the profit they would gain.
To sum, although many may disagree, it is widely suggested by psychologists to encourage the teenage to take part-time job. Not only will they learn responsiblity, but also they attain respect and feel that they are useful in the societ. By the way parents should not force their children to do anything they are not eager to do.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: much may; a good deal of may
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, but, if, may, so, well, for instance, by the way, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2102.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 433.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8545034642 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76203428643 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.4896073903 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 668.7 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.6498119337 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5454545455 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6818181818 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.68181818182 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.376634096525 0.236089414692 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117293807001 0.076458572812 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101131767944 0.0737576698707 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246510634287 0.150856017488 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0840963574221 0.0645574589148 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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