Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.
Nowadays, especially in modern countries, people have many enjoyable opportinuties to spend their time but the question is whether taking this opportunities will keep them behind of their responsibities in societhy. In my opinion if we face this chances with a concious mind, we can use them ti raise the results.
First and for most, people will do their responsibities in society if they can concentrate on them and it will not take place since they have solace in their lives. For example, imagine an employee which does not go to movies or travel with friends nd always doing his job without having fun. he will always think his self about the goal of his life and if it worth it or not so it will make him depress after some years and qat the end, the output will not be satisfying because he will not have passion to continue. Hence, if we ballance doing our duties and enjoying our time it will have better results.
Secondly, a happy society will lead to creative childrens who will perfectly build the future. if parents do not give enough time to their children, the emotional problems would be imperative for them. Therefore, it is not just earning money and doing jobs important, but we should consider training the next generation.
So the aim of the society is to not only carry out some tasks but also bring comfort for their families. these enjoyable opportinuties are important.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: these
...time but the question is whether taking this opportunities will keep them behind of ...
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...lways doing his job without having fun. he will always think his self about the go...
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...ns who will perfectly build the future. if parents do not give enough time to thei...
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Suggestion: These
... also bring comfort for their families. these enjoyable opportinuties are important.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 52.1666666667 44% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1158.0 1977.66487455 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 244.0 407.700716846 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74590163934 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95227774224 4.48103885553 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59281807883 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.606557377049 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 352.8 618.680645161 57% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1139882238 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.272727273 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1818181818 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176345579961 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0754753003915 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0653134228733 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0954944582752 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0614869646956 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 86.8835125448 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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