Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment – doing things they like to do – rather than doing things they should do.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Nowadays people around the world trying to have more fun than before, however, there is an opposite idea for this fact that believes people must work more than they do now. In my view, human societies, currently, could have more time for personal enjoyment, several reasons about my view point explained in the following paragraphs.
At first, there is no evidence which contains the fact in the statement. Actually, people in developingc try to have more time on their hobbies but they can't. On the other hand, people in those countries must try to do not lose their work! For instance, in China, people try to be in the office more than anyone else, there is a rough competition to gain and save a suitable job opportunity in that country.
Secondly, recent technologies, such as robots, artificial intelligence, etc. has made a big alter for human beings as a simple or professional worker, which means, an individual has more time to spend due to having less stress and more relaxing. my personal example is a compelling one in this matter. ten years ago, I was working in a traditional workshop in which we weren't able to use any novel facilities. Hence, we had to the same job for more than ten hours a day. Consequently, the boss managed to purchase new technologies by which we were free in most of the time at workplace. Therefore, I had more time for my personal activities.
To sum up, there's no doubt, by having time to do favorite activities, everyone feels more comfortable than spending time in workplace. Two important reason for this idea cited in the essay, one is about advances in technology, another notified attention to people who do not have enough time for themselves
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, no doubt, such as, in my view, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1408.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 294.0 407.700716846 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78911564626 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73760294725 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.581632653061 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 453.6 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.6894175269 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.571428571 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5714285714 5.45110844103 212% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185267905076 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0649555741208 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0553056768477 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133829046152 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0536271719225 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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