Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.
Since the beginning of this century, in all distinctive civilized societies, it has been a very controversial argument among individuals or even intellectuals, through which numerous conflicts has engendered. Some people are inclined toward the opinion that sitting in front of a computer and playing video games are wasteful; therefore, it should not be permitted, while others consider this issue in a whole diverse perspective. Although an absolute conclusion cannot be made in spite of all the opposite attitudes I strongly concur with the statement that playing video games is not useful for children. The outstanding reasons for my opinion would be explored below.
To begin with, sitting in front of a monitor for a long time is harmful for one's vision. I will be the first one to admit that playing video games in some cases is a relief. On the other hand, it would lessen children's vision. For example, my younger brother always plays video games; as a matter of fact, he doesn't even move his eyes for a long time in order to be focus on his games. After a couple of months, although he hated glasses, he had to wear them because of his decreased vision.
In addition to causing poor vision, it makes them lazy and fat. Children who play with computer usually would rather sitting and playing than doing physical activities so that they can concentrate on their game, and gain a higher score. Consequently, they get fatter as the time goes by. Everybody agree that it is dangerous for their health. In fact, not only does playing video games make children fat but also it is harmful for their body.
Apart from the points I made above there is also another reason that I would like to discuss about. That is, they learn nothing from playing video games. I believe that there is a lot of alternatives for playing computer games such as reading books or playing physical games; in fact, neither of them are as harmful as playing video games. Furthermore, by either reading books or doing physical activities children at least learn something that both advances their knowledge, and is useful for their future. From my personal experience, when I compare my brother who is nine years old with myself at my younger ages, I can see the difference very vividly. Due to the fact that my brother doesn't read books, he is not able to do his homework properly, and he always needs someone to get help from; on the contrary, I got A's in my school without any help all the time.
By way of conclusion, based on the argument explored above I strongly agree with the idea that video games are not beneficial for children, and they should not be permitted. Because first and foremost, it lessens children’s vision; moreover, it's not healthy. Also it doesn't teach anything to them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'consequently', 'first', 'furthermore', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'therefore', 'while', 'apart from', 'at least', 'for example', 'in addition', 'in fact', 'such as', 'as a matter of fact', 'in some cases', 'in spite of', 'on the contrary', 'to begin with', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.204081632653 0.229887763892 89% => OK
Verbs: 0.157699443414 0.158761421928 99% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0853432282004 0.0866891130778 98% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0593692022263 0.046263068375 128% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0890538033395 0.0685040099705 130% => OK
Prepositions: 0.150278293135 0.118717715034 127% => OK
Participles: 0.0463821892393 0.0351676179071 132% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.5562632917 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0185528756957 0.0309702414327 60% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0705009276438 0.0887237588012 79% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0185528756957 0.0209618222197 89% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00927643784787 0.0139019557991 67% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2786.0 2387.08602151 117% => OK
No of words: 482.0 408.028673835 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.78008298755 5.86048508987 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.48200974243 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.325726141079 0.338922669872 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.255186721992 0.251872472559 101% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.151452282158 0.174417080927 87% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0850622406639 0.112833075102 75% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5562632917 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50622406639 0.524397521467 97% => OK
Word variations: 59.0991259729 59.2087087015 100% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6684587814 111% => OK
Sentence length: 20.9565217391 20.5533526081 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.6208218651 48.84282405 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.130434783 120.699889404 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9565217391 20.5533526081 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.95652173913 0.644075263715 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.54480286738 126% => OK
Readability: 46.4751939383 45.7405998639 102% => OK
Elegance: 1.30909090909 1.45489161554 90% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.359163047331 0.300154397459 120% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.108329014206 0.103427244359 105% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0645381182737 0.0752933317313 86% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.459130353229 0.497263757937 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.126637115472 0.151897553556 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11586823518 0.114077575197 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0615519244339 0.0781384742642 79% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.272973752831 0.336927656856 81% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0504638719736 0.067059652881 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.231624264264 0.210909579961 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0228263307965 0.0618886996521 37% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.86379928315 233% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.4623655914 203% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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