Do you agree or disagree with the following statements?
Parents today are more involved in their children's education than were parents in the past.
There are many things that have changed through the years and a lot of our daily habits changed with time. personally, I believe that parents are not more involved in education like they were before. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
Firstly, life was much tougher in the past and parents had to work hard in order to feed their children. parents used to endure the difficult life by working almost all day and did not have the time to be involved in their children's education. Unlike today, technology has made the people's lives easier but opened so many work opportunities that the work has expanded so much making it so hard to spend time with their children. my personal experience is a compelling example of this, my uncle used to have a small company in the past and thanks to technology it expanded enormously and he started spending all of his time in the office. he only meets his children during lunch which is so little. Moreover, people nowadays are way richer than in the past and have money to travel the world for businesses resulting in spending much of their time out of the country.
Secondly, I believe that parents are getting used to teachers taking care of their children's education. parents are over relying on teachers and trust them blindly with their children. private lessons have played a very big role in this. children would normally go to their private lessons shortly after they come from school. this continues everyday for the seven days of the week resulting in the children and parents barely meeting and everyone chasing their lives. For instance, when I was taking my GCS's I used to have after school that ends at 8.00 PM. I used to come back so exhausted and just want to sleep. I did not meet my parents a lot for an entire year. The teachers were everything in my life because they were the only people I meet. this really did affect my relationship with my parents and they did not know anything how my studies were going throughout the year. they were shocked the moment they saw my incredible result because they did not have the time to check up on me and see whether i am clever or not.
In conclusion, I believe that parents are distanced from their children due to the excessive work they have because of technology, and because they over rely on teachers and getting their children into private lessons making it harder for them to meet
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, for instance, i feel, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2011.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62298850575 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36344423985 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47816091954 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 622.8 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.5615070003 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.7619047619 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7142857143 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7619047619 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253908137798 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0870318678804 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0721543207259 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161530961708 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0222070657956 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.21 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.