Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they already know how to do well.
I agree that successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they are familiar with. To illustrate, modern society advances with a rapid speed so people must learn new things continuously to catch up and further to success. Below are three examples that prove my statement.
To begin with, music industry is one of the most profitable industries in the world. People who work in this field keep try new things and styles. Take Taylor Swift, the most popular icon, as an example. When she released her first album, she was a country singer. Then, she began to play piano and guitar to make her music sounds more fruitful. Two years later she changed her style and became a pop singer, with a whole new image surprised everyone. Now almost every single of her is a huge success and the music video was clicked hundreds of thousands times on the internet. If she did not learn new skills and improve herself, she could not have the success she gets now.
Secondly, “Alibaba” is no doubt one of the most famous internet companies in the world. The fonder Jack Ma is a legend as well. Before becoming a well-known business man, he was an English teacher who had no idea about technology and business. However, after he leaned about the Internet, he decided to acquire more knowledge. Furthermore, he dared to set up his own company to run the Internet business. In less than 10 years, his business has dominated world of the Internet. He once said that stepping out of his comfortable zone was best decision he has ever made and he encouraged everyone to take the courage and try new things.
Last but not least, recently the youngest Nobel Peace Prize laureate appeared. Her name is Malala. She is an activist for children and women education. To be more specific, Malala had a hard time attending school because the local Taliban banned girls from that. She did not give in but it got her a lot of trouble. Even though Malala was only 15 years old, Taliban viewed her as threaten and shot her in the head. Fortunately she survived, and she decided to keep advocating her belief even though it was a risky decision. Malala will not be noticed by the world if she decide to give in. Consequently, people who want to success must be brave and willing to take risk.
In summary, I believe that successful people do not settle with what they already know. They have the courage to try new things and are not afraid of taking risks.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 572, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'decides'.
Suggestion: decides
...will not be noticed by the world if she decide to give in. Consequently, people who wa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, well, in summary, no doubt, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2037.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64009111617 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45573088997 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569476082005 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 635.4 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.8728976146 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.2413793103 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1379310345 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.1724137931 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253678134677 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0693395451095 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.138174478687 0.0737576698707 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209847721784 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.190368049453 0.0645574589148 295% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 11.7677419355 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.04 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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